Wonderful job with the chapter!

Great job with the chapter!

Hello! Here, I am, leaving a concrit as promised.

I think you're off to a very good start. I like that you're establishing that there are two sides to this conflict, both of which are flawed. I hate when stories make one of the pair the villain and the other the saint, because it so rarely works that way in real life. People are people. Flawed and beautiful. I'm really wondering how you're going to have MerDer straighten this out. Derek's going to need to figure out this isn't all on Meredith's head - she's got very real beef that Derek's sort of taking over the trajectory of their lives. He is. And Meredith's going to need to figure out you don't drop a bomb like "BTW I'll hold our family hostage, but you're totally welcome to go to D.C. if you want. Have fun," without some actual discussion, first. Like Derek said, she had plenty of opportunities to voice her objections, and she didn't. So, yeah, you've got a lot of meat here to chew on. I'll be very interested to see where you go with it. I hope they meet somewhere in the middle.

Random inane comments:
Meredith thinking of herself as a puppy dog was very strange to me. I 100% agree she has self-esteem issues, as is typical for someone who grew up in her situation. But usually when I think of "puppy" imagery I think Derek, what with the pouty eyes, and his tendency to serve as a doormat on the show. I'm also not convinced Meredith would be self-aware enough here to acknowledge that she's being selfish. I'm not sure she *would* see this as selfish so much as quid pro quo. Also, just out of curiosity, where did you get the idea that Meredith didn't want a "dream" house and that that was all Derek? I feel like, yes, that was his idea to start with, but she quickly bought into it. I mean, hell, she made him a house of candles :)

Bailey's pretty precocious, isn't he? He's only a baby, and he's already producing the letter L?

Technical issues:
You wander into distracting purple prose in places, where the imagery is far too violent and/or vivid for what's going on. For instance, the first few paragraphs - I get Derek is upset, but you almost had me thinking he'd been stabbed or was having a heart attack or something, and you yanked me right out of the story as a result. This happened again when Meredith is offering some introspection for how livid she is. It's not necessarily the imagery itself - you can use powerful imagery - but the sheer amount of it, a lot of which is repetitive and says the same thing again and again in different ways. Along those lines, I noticed a lot of redundancy (emotionally inside; skin pores; over-exaggerating; soars rapidly; unreasonably painful; etc). I think those are things you might want to watch out for in the future, if you haven't started doing that already (I know this is one of your older stories so I'm not sure how helpful this advice will be for your current writing).

Anyway, looking forward to more. Thank you for sharing!

I loved it. I really want to know how Meredith deals with everything but at the same time I really like where you ended it.

Really nice work! I loved it! I love seas 11 Fuchs with Derek ALIVE! Lol!

Thank-you...of course now everyone knows this did not/will not end as you have written the story. However, I think it's what real people do who love each other; they try to work issues out together. And sure you get mad, sometimes you're feeling selfish but plenty of couples work it out. In fact, I didn't agree with Cristina saying she's the sun - maybe it was needed to "wake her up" to how much she didn't want to go. I don't know, already said what I think, it's was not unrealistic but engrossing as it was written with the correct ending

"You know, Meredith is lucky to have you, Derek. I think you're the best thing that's ever happened to her. She deserves to have someone who chooses her first over everyone and everything else in the world." i cry.

But if that had happened in the show, oh my it would have been so perfect. But i still love how that storyline is working out, the more they fight the hotter will be the make up sex ehehehe'.

I wouldn't mind seeing this fic continuing despites the premiere, but still, greyt ending. I loved all about it 3

beautiful ending! It's sad to see this story end.

Please update soon

Thanks for the last amazing updates and sharing this story with us :)!
Loved it :)!

great story. am sorry to see it end.

I loved this story, I'm really going to miss it. It was great to have such an amazing story to read this summer in place of the actual show. I can't wait for your next fic :)

This story was fabulous, and I love your decision to have Derek resign so both Bailey and Alex could have spots. That could actually happen on the show as well - you are very perceptive.

This is a really great fix! Loved every minute reading it!

Wow, I can't believe this story is over! :(

I liked how everything seems in perspective for Derek now, how even the biggest decisions seem easier. I believe your idea of him stepping down is not as crazy as it might sound. He hates administrative work, we knew it from when he was Chief, and if he has to choose, he'd definitely pick the kids over the board. You know what was fun? Bailey's reaction! I cracked up when she just stormed out.

The last scene was so beautiful. The way you made the title and the quote fit there was perfect, just perfect. I love that you included the elevator in this, and that we can see how okay they are in the end.

I'm a little speechless, and a little sad that this is over. I truly believe you could continue this too, but I respect your decision of ending the story there. You reached a perfect spot, and sometimes it's nice to leave a few things unsaid, let our minds work on our own.

Thank you for publishing this story, and for updating it until the end. I'm looking forward to reading more of your other stories, or maybe even new projects of yours! Thank you so much!