This is a really good story! I'm glad you updated. I love the personality you gave the characters.

can u make more of this plz and thank you

This is sad. But. Very good! Please write MORE!

Love this story so far. Please update soon! :)

Argh! I want to read more! This is a fantastic start to your story! I love your writing style and your plot line thus far is just fantastic. I anticipate another instalment! Have a favourite and a follow :)

This is a very, VERY interesting concept/plot. Utter genius! It's beyond me how you managed to cook up this little beaut. *claps enthusiastically*

However, you should consider working on your grammar/sentence structure. I noticed tht you tend to do this: "Blah blah text". The fullstop, or period, should be before the closed inverted comma/end quote. The same goes for commas. Lastly, when you are stating a person's position then their name, e.g. 'The God of Evil, Demise', there should be a comma between the title/position and the person's name.

Otherwise, this is an extremely good stat for a story. Hope you update soon! Bye

- D. NatKiasu