This fic is awesome! Can't wait for the next chapter! Please Sasori lose control lol

Can’t wait for the next chapter! Keep up the good work

Good stuff! Good good good good goooood stuff!
My boys are so cute.. goodness so cute.

Really great story so far
You're an awesome writer!
I can't wait to see what happens next :)
Please update soon

I like the AU in here. Plus there's Sarori and a motorcycle and Deidara smokes. Please keep writing.

next chapter pleaseee

Oh you ARE alive!
Hah this chapter was so casual and adorable, I'm glad you're still working on it.

This fanfic is AMAZING! I can't believe it's your first one, it's really good and I love this chapter. Please keep updating! -

I love this story! Please update!

Gurl, I always enjoy the shit out of anything even remotely resembleung KakuHida.
But yes! I'm pleasently surprised myself at how much I enjoy this story! Can't wait for anither chapter. The sexual tenson alone between the two is making me chuckle darkly to myself like an evil villian...

Four Stars? Fuck that i give u ten stars amazing job cant wait to read more!

Gaah, I can never write a proper review but I can say that I really like this.. really, really like this. ;u; I hope you continue this not awful and actually very well written story soon!

Oh Yay! I love Akatsuki business stories. It looks good so far, I cracked up zt the FUCKING CRAB CAKES part. Oh Hidan... I notice he wasn't introduced though .
I'm looking forward to reading more!

I'm going to start off with the Authors Note... Don't demote your work at the end. People will stop reading.
Second... I can see the goal, the conflict, the setting, and the characters but I would try to describe less since you did manage to follow a minimalistic style with the characters but you over did it with the restaurant.
Third.. Your choice of how to describe some of these flowed very well, but in some places it felt forced and in some cases inappropriate for the portrait you were trying to paint.
Fourth... The formatting changed at the end from left to center and that distracted me from the story as I wondered why that was.
Fifth... You managed to place a past tense and a present tense in a thought when that thought was, I'm guessing, in present tense context.
Sixth... The reason I'm guessing this has very little reviews in the first place is because of the less than normal topic with Deidara at the center. This is a strange topic and a yaoi to take the cake. (In response to the forum you posted to) Your writing needs work but I feel that if you wrote for a different plot and main character than you could get a good amount of review.

To put things into perspective... I have a fanfiction that has 132 reviews and I have over 60-70k views. Out of the 17 views you mentioned it's no surprise no one reviewed. Just be patient and someone will review. Have faith in your writing and keep writing. I would enjoy reading more if your work.