Whew, I read these chapters just a couple days after the last bunch, but am only now getting to reviewing... I have to say that this isn't as good a wrap-up as I had hoped for, even if the resolution is satisfying. The main issue is Aria's motivations; I just can't buy her going to all that trouble out of simply physical attraction to a human, and her remorse at the end doesn't come off as authentic either.

The bits of merfolk history delivered through the conversation between Aria and Sting III are interesting, though. It adds to a story's credibility when you have a cultural background worked out for all of the peoples in it.

The banter between Melody and Aria is amusing and appropriate, especially Aria's referring to her as "Malady". The actual battle isn't exciting at all, though, again thanks to the use of gameplay mechanics.

The kiss at the end was very cute. It really made me smile. The "Bewitched" anachronism was an eye-roller of a joke, but it still doesn't ruin the mood completely. Overall, for all its flaws, this fic is a good bit of lighthearted entertainment.

A good bunch of chapters, pretty much continuing with the unpredictable adventure, delightful humor, and spot-on characterization of the first three. I do have to say, though, that carrying over the gameplay mechanics to the prose, as in the fight scene, is a BIG mistake. Prose and video games are two different mediums.

Chapter 4 is a well-timed change of scene to Eddie, Fiona, and Gilbert, and the bit with Eddie and Fiona having their adolescent minds in the gutter really made me chuckle. It's great to see Gilbert being put to good use as a veteran adventurer, and the Hydro-Maverick was an amusing, yet fitting, addition to the Brown line of vehicles. All too often in fanfic, it seems, the NPCs get no respect. You do very nicely with Gilbert here, except that it's very hard to understand why the party is completely unprepared for the mermaids' attack when they knew exactly what was coming.

One little error of note: "Melody lied on" That should be "Melody lay on".

Melody's line about "Is this what my mother died for?" just nails it. It's a great hard-hitting bit of monologue that captures Melody right on.

The ending of chapter 6 trails off a bit, but in a natural way, and the interactions between Fiona and Melody are good. I look forward to reading about how they get out of this.

Good start. I like a good adventure fanfic, and this one is reasonably unpredictable so far. Far-fetched premises like an underwater kingdom fit well into the world of Nostalgia. I just hope that you have an explanation for why Aria would want Pad as her husband. One minor problem so far: you keep saying that Aria "walked over". Mermaids traditionally don't have legs.

The passion between Melody and Pad is a little too bluntly stated in chapter 3, but as a general rule you have both of them characterized perfectly. And the humor in this is pretty effective for a debut fanfic. I especially enjoyed the line "I have to be. There's no way I'd get into heaven."