| Reviews for Dreams |
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Edhla chapter 1 . 8/23/2014 I'm mostly canon blind, but I really enjoyed reading this piece. You have an economy of style that really suits the subject matter, and this is tightly controlled, neither too long, nor cutting out important information. [bad,she] [you."He turned] Site ate your space here,, and here :) Seriously, thank you for knowing how to punctuate action tags like "Googler tilted his head"! Stylistically, I noticed that this piece is almost entirely told in the passive voice (in most cases of your using "had" here). I think moving them into an active voice might punch this one up a little. I'm not sure why "RENAMED" is in all-caps, but it could well be a canon thing I'm ignorant of. Thanks for writing this x |