| Reviews for Try Again |
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addie-scribbles chapter 9 . 8/15/2015 Will you ever continue it? I really like this story |
Cassieandra8291 chapter 9 . 10/31/2014 This story is really well-written, I love it! |
Forbiddensoul562 chapter 4 . 8/31/2014 Interesting development. I had an: "oh god is this MxM?" Moment reading over this xD but what can I say, I can't seem to hep |
Forbiddensoul562 chapter 3 . 8/30/2014 I'm bothered by Mello's fast decline into the state he's getting down into, and by the quick jumps your style makes fun one scene to the next. I think I'd much prefer a bit slower of a decline, but i might be jumping ahead of myself here! You might have something planned for the next chapters! So we'll see! On to the next one! |
Forbiddensoul562 chapter 2 . 8/30/2014 Wow was not seeing looking up pro sites. I figured this would stay much more an unconscious state for him. But thats an interesting development! |
Forbiddensoul562 chapter 1 . 8/30/2014 This is quite the interesting idea! I've been toying around with the idea of doing an ED centered MxN story for some time, so this is quite the great find. Your paragraph spacing is a bit strange, and I'm a bit lost by your interpretation of Mello. But we'll see what happens! I'm excited to see where you take it! On to the next chapter! |
mxmsupporter chapter 9 . 8/11/2014 Oh. That was very smart, bringing up A I mean. Although I think Mello is closer in personality to B, now I see that there are bits of A in him too... Mello feeling somehow guilty that Near knew his secret, wanting to hate him because of that but to no avail because the boy was the one who saved him... That's a tough issue. And a great material for dramatic scenes! The feeling of giving up is a relief... But for a short time. This chapter made me sad but well, I hope it's gonna get better... |
Dinorawrthefirst chapter 9 . 8/6/2014 STILL LOVE THIS |
mxmsupporter chapter 8 . 7/19/2014 Sorry for the delay, this week hasn't been especially good... Anyway. Aw, I love your L! He's so in-character, like a confused panda ;) Hm, feeling like you don't have problems compared to others... Hit close to home, if you know what I mean. And the sweetest thing? Matt being all like "but I thought you'd be happy to see me!" :3 |
Dinorawrthefirst chapter 8 . 7/17/2014 You are doing an amazing job with this story. I feel like you are taking this story in the right direction, and it actually feels like it could be apart of deathnote itself. Some thing that may help with the story is making the chapters longer. But keep updating this regularly and keep it in the direction it's going because I absolutely love this story! -Dinorawrthefirst |
mxmsupporter chapter 7 . 7/9/2014 Woah, I kinda didn't expect it. I've always had a feeling that Mello's problem had something to do with him being second all the time... You've got me c: Nice description of how he opened up, the stress... I felt similar. In fact, confessing/getting caught was one of the worst days of my life. Anyway. It's adorable that Mel is homesick! (don't ask me why, I just feel that it is ;) |
mxmsupporter chapter 6 . 6/30/2014 Dunno how you do it, but it gets better with every chapter. Seriously. Not only the story but your writing style. Eh, and as always, Matt's appearance killed me. This guy is so painfully in character... Kudos for that! Mello tries, huh? I loved the game over thing, btw. Oh, and adding this thing about the nurse was very cool... Like, Mel's not completely dead, he pays attention to beauty... Dunno, just felt nice to me :) |
mxmsupporter chapter 5 . 6/23/2014 Oh Mello... I can so relate to him. I have never been bullimic but I've had some self-harm issues. It's really like that, that you want to scream it to everybody... But if you spill your secret, what will be left of you..? Anyway :) I really love how you portrait the support Matt gives Mello. He's there, being the simple source of heat and affection, not trying to change him... And Near and L's concern is amazing too. |
Carottal chapter 5 . 6/22/2014 I think I would love to read this one shot. I think "And it seem like a good idea" is just dramatic enough to end a one shot and, call me crazy, I want to see the impact it would have on me. This story is better than expected. It's not that I have preconception of people based on their profile or picture, that would be crazy (and yours is cute)! It's just that I don't really enjoy reading self loathing unstable characters, following a path of self degradation and where the fiction ends up being an accumulation, a crescendo, of horrors that are so numerous it's not realistic any longer. And sadly, many fic dealing with a form of self harm ends up like this. I like my Matt and Mello with a strong mind and a touch of weakness to underline the power of their will. I like them to falter but I like them to stand up until their last breath. I like the lone and silent tear, that just appears and disappears as they allow their weakness to show, for one moment, just one. What got me to try it nevertheless was the title, because it was a promise of hope, like that sentence you finished your one shot with. And hope always makes it better! Anyway. First thank you for sticking to bulimia. Second, thank you for making Mello aware of what he is doing (so ironic how he got information on how to do it). Third, thank you for Matt's point of views that were awesome. And last but not least, thank you for making Mello give in to hope in the end. I still found some moments too melodramatic, in particular when Mello is insecure about Matt's feelings. But it's more a matter of taste than anything else. Because I could understand how he felt this way. I don't know much about self harm and the psychological triggers for them. Of course their must be lack of self confidence but there must be something else. Else, I think I would be self harming myself. Is it the mix of lack of confidence, stubbornness and care for the look of others that must be very high? Or maybe there must be loneliness too... Yeah, you made me wonder about this and I have to thank you for that too. I didn't understand if this was finished. Or to be more precise, I feel here could be a good end as we are reaching a crossroad in the story. But I wonder if you will let us cross the road with you and continue the story from here, or if you want us to decide which way we should go and trust us to try to cross the road. Thank you for the story :) |
MellodraMattic chapter 5 . 6/22/2014 YES I LIKED IT OHMYGOD. |