Awww, this was so sweet! :3

This was actually quite the heart warmer, great job

This is so cute. Although, the characters were a bit OOC. My fantasies about this couple have been fulfilled. ~_~

OMG it's so beautiful, I think im gonna cry! When is the next update coming up, like seriously!?

I read this story a long time ago when I was a lurker, and I felt the same way as I did then. I love it. Your writing style is easy to read, flowing and the kiss scene was perfect! I love to read more from you :)

This is so beautiful. *wipes away many tears* Wonderful job.

I was a sweet one-shot btw vol 3-6 of the novel can be found online (by fan translations) vol 3 can be found on another fanfiction site and the others just search the web.

This is so adorable! It's too bad we don't have a season 2 because the novel is awesome! Good thing Yen Press is translating it, thought they should do some proofreading and grammar check before publishing the next time since I found some spelling errors and they got Mei's hair colour wrong. XD

I wonder how it will take in the novel for Emi and Maou to confess their feelings to each other. The signs are definitely there since vol 1. Hahaha!

Aww how sweet!

This is good... really ... if you need critics then i tell you do not have to force using Japanese word in there... it

Oooh. I like ... MORE PLEASE!

"Emilia... I don't want to go back."

I love it! _

Aw this story was very cute thank you so much for writing it. Thank you for not describing the ending as well I enjoy sotries that are modest and simple in their romance aspect.

The Good:
- You do an excellent job setting a very tender scene. Each interaction is sweet and heartwarming.
- Your diction is very effective, especially in the most tender moments, which works well to keep that romantic fluff, but not choke the reader with it. "their breath mingled on the sensitive skin of their lips", "Moist warmth carried the essences."
- I like the format of the piece. You do an exceptional job of spacing everything out. You've got a little character and setting description, then a little dialogue, then some looking inside the characters' heads, then more setting description, more dialogue, and so on. It's very effective in creating the whole scene.

The Mixed:
- As much as I love the awkward romance of the scene, and as well-done as it is, I wonder if it's a little out of place. I suppose it works well enough considering this is a one shot, but I feel like this would take a little longer to happen if it were put in the show. Seriously though, I wish I didn't have to say that, because this is so nice.
- The dialogue and character interaction stays true to the original show, for the most part. But there might be one too many blushing reactions. Also, their interaction in the show is always so sarcastic and coy, I feel like you could make them reach the same romantic point while still keeping their interactions biting and sarcastic. But maybe that's not how you wanted to do it.

The Bad:
- I'm not a fan of throwing Japanese words into an English piece unless it's a name, Japanese place or concept, or something specifically from the show or manga. But aside from that just being personal nitpicking, I don't think it's fair for the reader to throw the words in. Even if you can figure some of them out from the context, it's not fair to assume the reader knows any of these words. Also, in my opinion, it just doesn't make sense for the characters to speak only certain words in Japanese.

Don't let the length of my mixed and bad critiques fool you, I thoroughly enjoyed reading this piece. Your voice is very great to read and you have a very good grasp on your diction. I want to see more of this. This show was way too short and there's not enough good fan fiction about it. Excellent work. Thanks for posting, and I can't wait to see more.

Please continue on this.