Aww, that was so cute! I love the interaction between Once-ler and Zorra!

Another great chapter! I love this OC, Zorra. I also love how Once-ler interacts with her.

This is off to a good start. I love how you have Once-ler's good and evil side arguing with each other. I also love how you included the little girl.

Cute update! :) Zorra reminding him of Pipsqueak is precious and his reactions are lightening up too!

I'm looking forward to the next chapter :D

Lol, Onceler is so incredibly AWKWARD with kids; kind of reminds me of myself! Zorra obviously loves him to pieces already, so let's see how much he'll grow to love her in return! Update soon!

I have to say that you write the child dialect very well. It actually makes the reader's here the voice better. Its funny to see Once-ler act awkward around kids and that's probably how I would act. XD Glad to see you've updated. I look forward to the rest. :)

Poor girl... Maybe the Once-ler will try and redeem himself by taking care of her? Looking forward to more.

I sense angst like whoa.

I loved the language you used in that poem/story/thought/whatever that Once-ler wrote down in the beginning. It's just like when a child is young and they're drawing, using their fingers and crayons and watercolors. It immediately took me back to my days when I was in art class as a kid, figuring out that I wasn't mean to become an artist :)

I'm curious to know this child's story, and her purpose in what's about to happen. Good luck with writing future chapters!

Wow...really...DARK! Can't wait to see more.

Well, all I can say is that I absolutely support well-developed OC's and this so far seems very unique. I haven't seen a Once-ler story that has an OC as a child. The beginning seems poetic and dark. There's a feeling of Silas Marner by George Eliot within. This is well written and has good visuals. You definitely have my attention on this story and I encourage you to continue. :)