Your story seems very interesting to me, I'll have to steal

Nice chapter to come back to

Very good but a few typos.

Guess I'll react in character:

"Ohayoo! This is Mea Kurosaki commenting! I like your story a lot! But is this chapter really a fanfic? Because it looked more like a written version of the manga. To be honest, I don't see anything new. I'm hoping that next time, It would be something Lala-senpai would really write. That's all for me!

Oh, and don't stress yourself too much, senpai. You can take all the time you need writing the next chapters, we'll be patient.'Till next time!"

good chap though i'm shocked that ren and run are not in the same body, what's up?

That... was too equal to the manga... it felt like i was reading the manga without the pictures... Don't get me wrong, sometimes it's cool to see something that happened in the manga in a fanfiction, but what happened in the this chapter is basically the exact same thing that happened in the manga, nothing changed... there was no Lala's touch in this chapter...
I'm really glad that you're back I was missing your work here. It's good to have you back, Mik... I mean Lala!

nice job on yui. how are you going to handle saki, rin and aya in here? i hate seeing them being mean to rito.

good job. though, i hope yui is not going to do the same thing she did when she first appeared in the anime.

I like where you're going with Yui, but why would Lala ever write hateful thoughts about herself if she doesn't even know that's what Run thinks of her? Guess you didn't think that through did you?

I see you're going for the anime version. I'm impressed, you re-wrote the whole episode. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Hahahahaha really good stuff keep it up

OMG OMG OMG. I NEVER KNEW MTLR WAS ON THIS TO. YOUR THE FIRST ONE IVE RED. I LOVE IT. EVER SINCE I COULDNT FIND SEASON 7 IVE BEEN GOING NUTS WITH FAVORITE ANIME WITHDRAWAL. I LOVE THE SHOW IM A GIANT FAN. PLEASE I KNOW ITS A STUPID REQUEST BUT WHAT IS THE NAME OF SEASONS 7 AND 8. PLEASE YOU'D BE DOING ME A GIANT FAVOR. LOVE YOUR WORK SEE YA. LOVE THE SHOW

T_T I'm sorry, I don't like it. Though many others might, so go on and continue. Personally I think Rito should be with Sairenji (and Lala knows how Rito feels towards Haruna and how Haruna feels towards Rito), but that's just me. But still, pretty good and mostly consistent with the first episode. Yes, I know it was supposed to be different, but anywho, keep going. ;)
Ja Nae!

An anime character writes a fanfic of his/her designated anime? That's genius!
This is really interesting. Can't wait for the next chapter!

Nice work Mik. The idea of Run and Kyouko being super hero was awesome. Looking forward for more.