Great story. Well-written, free of grammar and spelling issues, only wish you would have gone past this chapter to tell more about how Hermione settles into pack life. Wonderful job anyway.

poor Hermione. wonderful writing thought

Great story please update xxxx

Holy punctuation problems, Batman!

You should probably clean this up. The apparent complete lack of understanding concerning punctuation within dialogue was very distracting. I couldn't enjoy this because of the severe punctuation problem. The writing style is also quite immature and elementary. That's unfortunate, since you have a fundamentally cool idea here.

This gave me chills and I love it! Its unsettling, gripping and the basis for any good thriller! In fact, I believe I can hear the soft strains of the song in the background! Just amazing work, everything was amazing and I love it!

Interesting use of sentace length here to create a beat to her fear. Thank you for sharing!

OH MY GOD! WHY DID I NOT KNOW ABOUT THIS?! I love this so much...Hermione so scared, but realizing that she has a new home even if she doesn't want to accept it. Love it!

OKAY so I was going to read this last night but I fell asleep but I love this! You wrote Hermione's fear really well and I really enjoyed this. Thank you for writing!

Ohh, I love Hermione and Fenrir together;).

Please make a sequel.

Oh damn, I like this a lot

Whoa! This was so action packed in such few words. I loved how Hermione was in a panic, how worried and scared she was. Uh, i like it when the characters suffer lol. I think you built up the anticipation well, too.

Good start. Can't wait to see the rest...
Thanks for sharing this with us.
Chise

plz continue I love this bike story so far

PLEASE continue

Hope you continue, great story so far!