My main problem with this is the fact that all of it is entirely in first person. (Not objectively a bad thing, but I just personally don't like it for works of fiction" Not only that, but it's seems to be comprised mostly of dialogue, so it makes it seem more like a script, than a work of literature. Another thing,
You seem to like to put your adjectives and other words in parentheses? Is that just a stylized way of writing? Also, that ending was really out of character, perhaps you could have made the kiss an impulsive thing on himawari's part, and then both of the girls would have acted embarrassed in their usual tsundere manner. Maybe then that would give you the room of expanding on this incident in a future work?

However I did really enjoy it, I loved how well you understand the characters dynamics between the yurus work, and I found the jokes you included to be very funny. Also you seem very passionate about your work, anime, and yuri... I think that's wonderful! keep writing, and have a wonderful day!

Right off the bat, you shouldn't have to point out who's point of view you're reading, it should be done by context clues, as it breaks the immersion, and it comes off as extremely akward and forced.

I'll give you a full review once I actually read the whole thing.~

(This wasn't intended to be mean, it's just constructive criticism, sorry if I was a little too harsh. Besides, all himasaku shippers are my comrades and I love them!)

YAAAAAY! YOU KNOW WHAT TOUHOU IS TOO! *starts fangirling*

Amazing story! I really, really, REALLY loved it! The ending was so cute! I loved how they kissed each other and stuff! I just LOVE HimaSaku and you totally nailed a great fanfic, even if it was a little OOC. Great work!

I decided to leave my review on Chapter 2, since this was the chapter that you talked about Touhou in your A/N.

I would rate this story 5 out of 5 stars! You did a great job! Keep up the good work! :)

KAWAII! Love the ending for this :3

PHASE THREE! WHAT will happen... Im scared ;)

Im very interested in whats happening next. Youve got me hooked on this story.

What IS she up to... Its almost scary ;p

Whats she forgetting...

Sakurako seems to be slightly horny... XD such a funny chapter!

G-damnit, everyone forgot both Akari and Rise-san.
Hahaha, loved this chapter.

lol Akkarininja skillz (‿ ) (*)
the Awemoesome Machine strikes again! phase 3 plz!
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hehehe i can't wait for phase three (*c*) please update soon :)

Err...updaaatteeee..

Nice chapter! (Still pretty short tho)

I'm still reading!