so this started out fun, but quickly devolved into a bucket filled with contradictions and repetitions.

And you just confused me all over with that ch 24 now will he keep this change I wonder?

Any chance of this story continuing?

Awsome

Please continue this amazing story, this one of a kind story makes most others look like fallout 4. Your version of this story offers the gritty truth and culture clash that I’ve come to love. So if your listening, I’ll keep reading, thanks for the fun times. Sincerely, a Reader

i have no fucken clue whats going on, havent for a couple chapters

This isn’t an Adventure story as the label suggests. You should change it to Humor/Drama or something. Not necessarily a bad thing, but it put me off from finishing your story, unfortunately.

There were times when the plot gets disjointed, as if different events happen with little to no connection, primarily because of brief recollections and flashbacks. I’m a bit reluctant in calling this a flaw per se when I think you intentionally structured the plot this way, presumably to parallel Six’s contradictory personality. Interesting approach. Some strange inconsistencies though, like when Yang’s punch only succeeds in Courier’s head jerking to the side and then later on she’s able to knock him flying. Not too bad, but stuff like that’s hard to miss.

This fic is just not for me. The summary and genre had me thinking this’d be the Courier drastically changing the world of Remnant in his own maybe-flamboyant-maybe-chaotic way, not a deconstruction of his character. Though I do like how your version of Six leans slightly more towards the evil side of the karma spectrum, if his erratic, psychopathic behavior is anything to go by. Your Courier in this fic never struck me as neutral. Makes for a good reaction from the people of Remnant.

What I absolutely loved about this fic is the unfiltered dialogue, particularly from Six. The attraction to little teenage girls shtick is a giant no-no for me though. Gross, but I like how Six expressed that shit as a passing fancy. Seriously, you are VERY good at this type of dialogue, the type where people just say what they want with no gateway.

While this fic was not to my liking (I couldn’t read last the tenth chapter), I like your writing style. Good for character study type fics, ya get me? Hope ya make for stuff for us.

damn it had to be a fake number... next thing you know thats actually lower than his actual

Demoman Vodka Drugs Wild Wasteland-in-a-guy perk Six

My kill count us actually realy high, considering i killed everybody and fired the divodes missles yeah, 46000 is not that far fetch.

Companion quests

XD

Cave the skull of the crone, rob her, then burn her shop. Then, snap her ankles, then repeat this process in reverse.

that'll show the fortune teller.

I would enjoy this much more if i could comprehend it, it just seems like your missing details all over the place and your format is nlt helping in the slightest. Perhaps I've just got my hopes up after reading World of Bloody Evolution by Stormshroud, now THAT is a damn good story.!

Jacob?

Terrible. Just terrible.

He should change his name to Kellogg the serial killer, or just 6.

Or ...

MARKED ONE

I miss Rawr. Was Scuddles I a deathclaw?

Deathclaw clone armies!

Or grimification!

I guess we'll see.