This is an awesome idea. You wrote the characters really well.

This is pretty cool, and quite well written. Good job, and keep writing!

This is really very good, I didn't expect to see a, decent grown up version of Calvin, Susie and Moe. But you did a great job, characterizing Susie and Calvin ad "almost friends" was perfect

Oooh, interesting! I'm curious to find out what happens.

I think this is a good start. Fairly interesting. Want to know what's happening. Hope you continue. :)