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Goodbye mister the fourth ಡ ͜ ʖ ಡ

Sauron and Arthas the Ice King (is the description correct? I can't remember Warcraft III very well) appeared? Overkill. Nice one man

yeeeeeaaah i can kinda see you lost your train of thought in that last chapter (not that i blame you) if you're going with a colder Naruto that's fine but DON'T make him cold or cruel to his love interests also just an idea for a few Tayuya,Shion,Karin. also yeah maybe don't have Gods they kinda make things either pointless if it's not them or weird, don't forget Middle Earth Shadow Of Mordor/War and take inspirations from it, but yeah i really liked this story and think in its re-write you should have longer chapters (i know everyone says that) but you really should pace yourself write out EXACTLY how you want the story to go and then do the fillers to have it more full and yeah focus on building Naruto as a character before going to the main story

Cliche and boring. Oh what? A random idiot with a Naruto story sent Naruto to Wave? Truly a piece of original storytelling. . . .

It's made even worse by the fact that you saved the reveal for the last few sentences of the chapter, as if you were doing something epic. Ha.

There IS NO WAY orochimaru is that powerful, sauron's power ALONE should be able to CRUSH him, add in the LICH-KING and OVERLORD and it's kinda obvious that the sannin is OUTCLASSED IN EVERY-SINGLE POSSIBLE WAY COMPLETELY... I mean EVERY one of them is a WORLD DOMINATOR, and the snake can BARELY control one back-water village. So big-butt boom? Shift to wrath state and watch it wash THROUGH, OR put up "anti-magic shell"... OR "shield"... see? CAKE-WALK.

I love it this is great my friend.

of i fucking gonna make naruto destroy him

"Sure thing Mandy." *spits tea all over my computer screen* what the sHIT!?

i followed it up to chapter sixteen before it got stupid and he was way to weak against orchimaru

Amazing!

why not get both sakua and the sand gril too be in his hamie as will

This is a horrible story go kill yourself

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Complete fucking garbage. Fuck you. You wasted hours of my time reading this bullshit from making it start out so amazing and turning it into this WASTE!

...Horse shit, you really seem like you're not even trying with this anymore, you're simply haphazardly throwing shit together and hoping it works with as little detail as needed. Getting real fucking old.