This is fascinating, especially now everyone has met. I strongly suspect the portrait is of Morgana.

One thing to watch out for: All of your characters use the same, grammatically incorrect sentence structure:”... me and Sarah grew up...” Neither Giles nor McGonagall would use poor grammar. They would stay “Sarah and I grew up...” (Basically, you can tell the grammar is correct by testing it with the pronoun alone. If you would not say “me grew up”, you would also not say “me and Sarah grew up”.

I can deal with it when someone like Ron, who couldn’t care less about proper grammar, uses bad grammar. Giles has been shown in canon to be fastidious about such things, as has McGonagall.

By having them all use the same (bad) sentence structure, you are throwing away the chance to use subtle cues to their characters, which could keep them in character with minimal intrusion to the story.

You also seem to have regular word mixups:

To Bare (bared, baring) to make naked
To bear (bore, bearing) to carry a physical or emotional weight (Hermione couldn’t bear to stay in the house alone)
To bar (barred, barring) to prevent entry.
Peace and Quiet, not piece and quiet...

Despite these issues (that a good beta could catch) your plots are always compelling, your ideas fascinating. I love the culture conflict between Giles view of Vampires, Werewolves, etc., and the Wizarding worlds, as well as their contradictory perception of what constitutes dark magic. With the type of Magic Willow used, mental manipulation did lead down the path to dark magic, much in the way the Imperius curse would.

Good world building. I really want to read more!

another reread. aa good as the times before.
thanks

I enjoyed reading this story, I hope that one day you'll continue writing it. it has defintly peaked my intrest. Thanks for the entertainment!

Holy crap. This is a great story! I love it

Please can I have some more. -

interning plot ;D

I realize this is probably a lost cause, but I really enjoyed this story and would love to see it continue.

Very nice. Hope you return to this some day.
Thank you.

Tom A.

You published this in April 2014, with no updates. Please don't let this story end here.

Fab story! I like Giles being Hermione's uncle, I can kind of see it

what a great beginning I hope you will continue this. tis good.

Nice story, had real potential.

Nice story, too bad you stopped writing it, I would have loved to see how it continues.

OK, I'm confused here. Recently I've read a spate of stories that have people dying, and it never gets easier, or its never all right. I just don't get it. I lost my dad when I was 18, my mom when I was about 35, and I mourned for a couple of days, then got over it. I understand it's going to be worse, the younger you are, but neither myself, nor anyone I know has had weeks of intense grief over losing our parents. Obviously, it's very different for some people, than others. Hmm.

Anyway, another enjoyable story I wouldn't mind seeing more of, some time.

Hey Ian was just rereading this fic and had a thought. You know I think you should continue this one but I'd also like you to maybe change it a little. Could you make it a Harry/ Herrmoine romance. Now that moine has lost her mum and dad She and Harry have even more in common. Both are muggle raised ( though maybe Monie isn't muggle Born like everyone thought) and their both orphan's now. Just something to think about

*Hugs& kisses*