Hey Matt! It's Robert, and I have arrived to begin reviewing your story! :D

Now, obviously, this is your first story, created way back in 2014. Therefore, any mistakes grammar-wise that I point out, keep in mind that u likely don't make them any more since you've gained a lot of experience since then. Im just gonna point errors out though bc anyone who doesn't know u and starts with this story will judge it as is.

So with that said, already an intriguing first chapter. The first is one of the hardest chapters to write as it sets the tone for the entire story. I don't usually see the villain getting introduced in most stories, but it has been done before and I never object to it. It appears that the main antagonist will be this Migal Sanchez and his two crows. (I hope u don't mind but for my sake bc their names are a little difficult, Im gonna refer to them as K and R in my reviews). Of course they're going after the blue macaws; Blu and Jewel can never just relax XD.

Very interesting start. Im already picking up exciting adventure-type vibes. I only saw one mistake in this chapter and it has to do with your verb tense. I've personally never seen anyone do this before so I don't think it's correct. The way u write your sentences with the actions in present tense such as:

Migal pauses and sits up straight.

It makes the flow sound strange to me, kind of like Im reading a script that tells the actors what to do in a play. I've always seen people write in past tense.

Migal paused and sat up straight.

It makes it sound more like a story, something that already happened and now it's being told to us.

That's my only issue though. Besides that, definitely a start that hooked me in and I look forward to reading more :)

Hello, great story so far, there's just one problem: the grove is NORTH of Rio, not South (they had a map montage showing that in fact). When I first saw the mistake, I thought it was Nico and Pedro trying to misdirect the crows. Now, I see that they are morons...

At a last, I have reached the end of De Grande Conflict, your first Rio story. Time to leave you my final thoughts. It was a good premise from start to finish. Taking place after the second movie is always a smart tactic, gives you limitless ideas that could follow the already known story and you did that well.

Story wise, I liked the premise from the beginning. Taking place after the ending is great, as it gives you the freedom to write how you please without concern for continuity. Most of the story had me captivated from start to finish, however, there were a couple of instances I was mixed on. The drama chapters, while not bad, it felt out of place to me and I'm uncertain as to why you wrote them into the same story. But I'm not stating that as a fact, that's just my personal opinion. Furthermore, I do like how it somewhat teases and builds up towards future sequels, something I see you have plenty of.

Now, for characters. Happy to say, I enjoyed how you wrote our faithful characters while adding your own OCs. Ray's development nicely built up from start to finish, it was believable and good to read. Kroh was an interesting antagonist and how he ties into Blu's past. As for the other characters.

Now for the criticism. Your structure was top note, no problem there. Spelling wise, there were a couple of typos that my eyes caught. As for grammar, that applies on the same level. They were very minor to the point I can't even recollect where they were located. Another positive there. One more thing: I recommend getting rid of chapter 21, you shouldn't do chapters that are literally just an author note, it's against rules & guidelines.

And that’s my review for Rio: De Grande Conflict. I enjoyed this story, I think with a few tweaks here and there, you could make this perfect. As much as I pointed out in my reviews, nothing stopped me from enjoying it. Excellent work and I look forward to seeing what you have produced since then.

And thus, the final battle between blue macaws and the crows has concluded. What did I think? It was great, some serious writing at it's finest. Have to say that this is one of my conclusions for a battle, ranging from the descriptions of the fight, the explanation of their impact, the emotional impact the blue macaws feel, all good stuff.

Now, the criticism for these next few chapters. By stating “He had enough of his brother’s problems”, I feel that you might have spoiled what was to come. It was evident at this point that Ray was going to turn sides, but I feel obligated to point it out, all the same. Another minor error that caught my eye. Kroh references how he knows Blu from twenty-five years prior. Assuming he was around adult age already, that puts Kroh and Ray far beyond the average life span of a crow.

Another problem I have is I believe you stated this story takes place not long after Rio 2's events, based on a comment by Jewel in chapter 5. If so, this would place Blu at eighteen years old. How could Kroh have known him for longer?

First off, I'm not gonna say anything further about the second irrelevant chapter, because it will most likely be a carbon copy of what I stated in my previous review. Moving on, the story is building up with a nice pace. It's good to see how you maintained the new peace between The Blue and Scarlet clans, the little details are always the best.

I was about to leave a criticism as to why Kroh and Ray have little character development as we reach the halfway point, but you appear to have beaten me to the punchline. In contrasts to Nigel, these two have their own personal agenda for their criminal actions. Adds to their character, well done.

An interesting cliffhanger, I believe we are approaching the final confrontation. No doubt the blue macaws are in for a surprise, and honestly, I look forward to seeing how it unfolds. Keep up the good work.

It seems Ray is unintentionally building a friendship to the Blue Macaw Tribe. Considering we know what is to come, this is tragic in a matter of speaking. I have no doubt you may be building up Ray to slowly develop into a saviour, but I could be wrong.

Moving on, chapter 11 was an interesting contribution. I know you stated it was an irrelevant chapter, but all the same, it felt out of place and threw me off for a minute. It was a good chapter, all the same and I can appreciate the A/U, but for future reference, I feel it would have been better to have it in a separate story.

Next three chapters, let's get into it. It seems Ray and Kroh have established trust between the blue macaw clan, quite the pair of manipulators. However, it seems they are in danger of slipping out their true intentions. Only so many excuses can get you so far.

One detail that caught my interest was the introduction to the amazon laws. It's a good way to establish how the clans of Rio live together and how they keep personal space away. We have yet to see more macaw clans in the amazon, I look forward to seeing more of the population.

Furthermore, Migal and his group of mercenaries seem far superior to Marcel and Big Boss, intelligent, organised and manipulative. With this team of antagonists, I honestly cannot see how they stand the chance of defeat. I shall find out shortly as I dive deeper into the story.

Here we are, next couple of chapters, let's get into it. To start off, I do appreciate that you've demonstrated how close Blu and Eduardo have bonded, the simple detail of the former referring to him as "Dad" further adds to that. Nice touch.

Seems Kroh and Ray have made their move and infiltrated the clan. I will admit, I'm a little hesitate as to how you handled that. Being the strict clan leader and all, I didn't suspect he'd be so willing to allow them into their home with a few simple words. Then again, I could chalk it up to Eduardo easing down on hostilities since the movie's events.

Little suggestion for future reference: try to avoid using the same words in a sentence. For example, instead of, "Blu said as looked back at Blu and Jewel's first encounter", try "Blu said as he thought back to their first encounter". Also, when it comes to the name of species, unless it's the start of a sentence, you don't need to capitalise. All in all, good work.

Hey Yootis, I promised you I would go back and revisit your old work, and I intend to keep my promise. I know I left one final review here quite some time to go, but maybe my opinion will differ upon giving it a second read. You have quite a few stories to get through, so without further or do, let's get into it.

Right away, I am captivated into the story. The blue macaws have finally settled down into a peaceful life of the amazon. The scene with the family of blue macaws was both warming and gave off a comical vibe. Their dialogue between each other flows quite well.

It doesn't feel forced or cheesy, it works. You also did a great job showcasing the kid's unique traits in once small instance. As for Kroh and Ray are building up to be interesting protagonists. This is off to a strong start and I am very pleased to see what you have to offer.

Hello, it's Kraft again,
So I'm going to retract my last review, this is a lot better in terms of Descriptive narrative, great job.

Hello there, my name is Kraft, if you haven't heard of me I am a good friend of Ricardo the black hawk, he gave you a shout out and I figured I would come and check out your stories. A bit about me, I am a professional writer and publisher with many awards under my belt in the writing field so I have made a profession out of looking at and reading other peoples stories as well as writing my own. So I'll be looking at your story for overall quality, writing style, technique, and the flow of characters and dialogue.

First the good things: You have great dialogue, it flows smooth, I can hear the characters in my imagination. Love it. Then comes the descriptive narrative, when you do use it, it flows smooth, is fluent enough, you avoid the traps which often befalls writers (-ly adverbs and adjectives, using was, had, were, etc) so good job there.

The one issue is, there's not enough of the good stuff. Your descriptive narrative is so well done, I want more of it.

why isnt this a separate story? its really good though!

What a sweet twist! Kroh still lives?! I think you should write a chapter that talks about Kroh surviving the crash of the cage falling on him within the damaged cage and prove what may happen next time if that bad bird is ever going to appeare again! I am glad that Amanda will be all right and I am shocked that Migal is considered dead.

I enjoyed this chapter a lot.! I think a Epilogue would be nice if you're willing to start another story! Also since Ray is going to be in Rio: the LS series next, keep on writing, I'll read more when I can!

That was very spectacular, daring, and heroic that sure was! You're a brave genius there! I enjoyed this part a lot more than the last one! Great job! Kroh is gone for good and Ray is a hero! I am very proud of Ray for saving the day at the right time!