Gruesome but strangely fitting too. You spell out in your story what we all thought the peach dream is really about - innocence lost and spoilt. Why the time loop though? That had me thinking. Are you alluding to the fact that Jareth in the end of the day lives up to expectations and is therefore more trapped and punished than her?

This fic reminds me of a photograph negative. Love the way you have turned this whole scene on its head, not sure I will ever be able to see the ballroom scene in the same way again. An excellent job, well done.

Wow... This is one of those stories where I wish it weren't a one shot, but if it were longer, then the effect of the ending and everything wouldn't be as great. This is great. Just out of curiosity, what exactly was the prompt? I love how you end the story almost exactly how you began it, just like how the characters have to keep repeating the same thing over and over again.

What a nightmare. Beautifully written. This is meant to describe his curse, a curse, his loss...a. dream made into a nightmare?

Truly haunting, beautiful writing.

This fits in really well with the Labyrinth's whole "mind-fuck" motif. Well done.

The way everyone stops and realizes what they've done, kind of begs the question if they are choosing to continue on in this time loop or if it's something beyond their control doing this to them. I'm very curious...

I wonder how they got caught up in this loop. I feel sorry for everybody. They need a hero, or heroine.

This was really powerful and gruesome but wonderful and somehow beautiful. Well done

Well then. That was... a very, very powerful one. It was wonderfully written; I'm at a loss for words but it was darkly beautiful. I was shocked at first but it was very intriguing as I read on.

Holy hell... that was intense...I'm hearing flogging molly's song on the devil's dance floor in my head now. Interesting twist.

Oh my goodness. This is such a harshly true depiction of the "rape fantasy." It's utterly horrifying and beautiful at the same time.
The last sentence is so haunting. Jareth and the others just play a part in the lurid fantasy over and over again. Wow.
I wish I could think of more to say, but I'm speechless.

Wow...that is very powerful!

What Toy Story does for toys, this one does for fanfic characters. Sometimes I wonder about what we put them through. (Okay: what *I* put them through.) I wonder if they're somehow aware that they serve our desires, and if they resent it. If I had been in Jareth's place in the film, I would have been SO MUCH more cruel to Sarah. Because it really WAS all to serve her, even himself. And anything self-aware enough to say "Everything you have wanted I have done" is aware enough to resent its own captivity.

You definitely took a risk here, but I think it'll pay off. It's pretty gruesome, and the sympathies of the readers end up going to an unexpected character, but it works. Ugh, that ball is so grotty!

Now we all must write something rated K and doublecute.

...unless you've gotten a taste for this horror business. :D

Extraordinary story and really fascinating!

This concept is just amazing. A lot darker then what I'm used to from you, but still great.