Incredible! Best erotic fic I've ever read. Not overly descriptive but not too bland/boring.

Your dialogue is fantastic! Feels much like the character's from the actual anime/manga.

The first half of their conversation was fluid and very on character. I was thinking, "Damn. This is the best dialogue between these two of ANY fan fic I've read."

But once it got to Revy mentioning the rape it didn't read fluidly. I think Revy would have said "dad" and I think it's hinted somewhere that when she asked for help from the cops she was gang raped in prison by the cops. That's why she snapped. She knew there wasn't any higher power to look out for her. This is the most traumatic part of her past. This is what defines her.

On the flip side, you have Rock's personality down. I mean you really get him. I can feel why he does what he does and says what he says. People usually mess him up because they consider him bland or just see him react superficially to Revy. You understand that as Revy 's foil he often latches more to his convictions.

Thank you.

nice job

This was a great story. I've got nothing but good things. Keep writing.

I do agree with the eyes being something to absolutely take Revy by surprise as well as them being a piece to what makes her respect him more. But i have a lot of trouble seeing Rock as this forward of a character, its no his personality to be so forward when it comes to relationships, at least not in this tone.
Of course theres Rock's thing about not using guns that makes this story a little... Tough to read. I probably wont really be following this story, but i felt it necessary to voice criticism.

Revy got attracted to Rock coz he is the only one who stood this long without resorting to typical guns and its because of his willpower too that she is attracted...she is not attracted to gun wielding badasses (there are other gun-wielding badasses in Roanapur) she is attracted to his most unique methods of non violent methods.

Another gun-wielder is yet another run of the mill gun wielder...Rock's uniqueness is over then. His weapon is his brain and sword is the pencil.

usually I'm afraid of reading ongoing fanfics, worrying bout it won't be finished but go to hell with it, I'm just done reading all 5 chapters! looking forward to seeing Rock in action, and I'm happy that you mentioned that he's had some shooting practice with Revy before this. This is better than making someone become a shooting expert after holding a gun for the first time. *psst anime Yukio*

Just read all the chapters and I like it.

Your story is awesome.I totally enjoyed it.
I liked every thing in this fic.
Thanx.
Update soon.

good to see an update on this story, hope to see more

Jesus! That was seriously good...you gotta continue. C'mon, you just gotta! Great and still true to the story.

Hell ya you need to continue this

Excellent;-)

yes another chapter love it