Just go and get Tiamat, Shirou!

And please update!

Awesome! Please continue

Plz update this us very good

I am out. I am done with this fanfic.

I wanted to keep reading in hope of it improving as it was written over a large span of time. But it’s repeating the same shit from canon. Asia still managed to die so they can revive her. Issie sacrifices his arm for more power. At this point it just feels like canon but with archer added in.

And the fact that events are written in the past tense constantly in summary instead of in the present in detail. Is very annoying as it kills any immersion you had while reading

I read the first 4 chapters and while the story itself is very intriguing the execution of it is bad. It literally made me cringe and close the page more than once.

It’s actually not that bad. And the problems can be fixed with a bit of rewriting and editing. It just that events are described as having happened instead of being shown as they happen. And sometimes the characters act OOC. While Issei’s change in character can be explained by how his life after becoming a Devi is different than canon, as we actually don’t see him changing but are just briefly told he spends his time in extreme training, he feels off.

Like if Issei was showing during training developing some hate towards Rayner as type of stress relief his aggression the next time he sees her can be explained, but as we don’t actually see much of him, and in canon he was soft abound not wanting to hurt her, it feels weird how it plays out in this novel.

Idk if this story is dropped or not but I’ll put this piece of constructive criticism here just in case you ever decide to pick it up again.

While the idea behind the story is good. You are constantly stating how events have played out instead of writing them as they happen. Or describe how his relationship with other people improved. And while that does help speed up the story so you can get to the parts you want, it lowers the quality by a lot. Unless it’s a time skip try to avoid describing how things played out and actually write them as they happen. And even then don’t use time skips too often.

Honestly while the story itself is interesting, there are inconsistencies, like the way Archer interacts with the others as if he knows them. I understand that from your point of view as the author you know all the characters so you write them acting around each other with that knowledge, but archer just met them and he is talking as he has known Koneko for a long time.

A singular pawn piece. For ARCHER. This a real bruh moment.

please update this story

ooooffff fu ck this I just wasted time for this

Please update this story, or are you dead yet?

Just discovered this fic, and although it seems to be already abandonded i cant help but leave a comment or two.
The chapters 1 and 2 so far are well written and the background you made for Shirou is well thought out and as far as i can tell, uniqu for this crossover.
The only point i have issue with so far is, that you have Shirou with the personality akin "Emiya Shirou" instead of "Archer - EMIYA"
Although they are essentially the same person, EMIYA wouldnt go back to want to do heroic stuff instead.

thankss for the chapter

One pawn piece for emiya? Bs he's got more potential then issei even counting boosted gear

Is this story being continued?