Raph has sias not daggers, but it is easy to get confused. I had no clue what they were for a while

Since when did Shredder do hug and Karai says "OMG"

Heeeey! Me again!
Just another tip!
I think you should try cutting down on your "..."s; there's quite a bit!
Maybe try using different punctuation, like colons, semi-colons, periods, etc.
Great chapter though!

Plss let her fall in love with leo!

It's a great story and I really love it! You are a really great writer!

But I would suggest longer chapters. :)

HEEY IT'S ME! THE FIRST CHAPTER IS REALLY GOOD!
To answer ur question from GOOGLE, I would recommend u doing it in Lilly's P.O.V.
That's what I personally prefer and most people I know prefer the OC's P.O.V.
Other than that, great chapter!