SPOILERS. in case someone hasn't read yet. i enjoyed this story. there was a lot of fluff, not too much drama, not too much action. there was a lot of "inner thoughts", meaning a lot of Tris & Four thinking to themselves, if that makes any sense. and when Tris gets pregnant, she loses the baby. i have read this in so many stories here on fanfic. "tris gets pregnant (at 16), loses the baby, her & four fight, break up, then get back together, etc. Every. Single. Time. is this a normal thing - for 16 years old to miscarry? i don't know, i was just hoping to read one story where that doesn't happen. but anyways...

there were a few "events" that didn't get explained. like why nita pulled a gun on them when they tried to leave the bureau. never explained why.

there were a few spelling & grammatical errors, but nothing you can't figure out.

all in all i enjoyed the story.

Good chapter.

Nice little mini family going on there, but still can't picture Christina in abnegation.

So glad they resolved that quickly.

Glad four feels he can talk to Caleb.

So hoping that WAS NOT gonna happen.

Oh no! No more drama for Four & tris - please!

So glad the 4 of them are getting along.

Tobias overreacted towards his mother I think. Him moving back to abnegation seems like a logical question for Evelyn to ask. After all he lived there with his father who beat him, so you would think going back anywhere in abnegation would give him nightmares.

Glad about the Four/Zeke friendship!

Yeah - they been through a lot, but a kid is another thing altogether.

Kinda knew that was gonna happen!

Not to many people liked how allegiant ended. That's why we appreciate people like you who write "alternate" endings!

That's an older brother for ya!

Interesting chapter. Anxious to see what they find