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A nice little story you have there. I can appreciate the attempt of giving this series a sweeter ending rather than the bittersweet one it originally had. While not really necessary, a lot of people had asked for one and I think they might have found what they had been looking for in your story.
Still, I find it a shame that the whole narrative felt so rushed from beginning to end. There was literally no break for the reader to take as the plot basically decided to unfold in a flash.

Unfortunately, there is no real pacing going on. The story just keeps rolling from one scene to the next with no intersection at all. Even the dialogue felt rushed at times, which is a real shame since Karin reuniting with her family would have made for some nice scenes and dialogues.

There were a lot of scenes in the story which could have served as great buildup for tension or drama, but were left unused. There could have been a lot more conflict for Kenta and Karin as they would have too decide whether to turn the rest of the family into vampires as well, since it kind of is a big decision to make.

The fighting scenes were also rather short and chaotic. I still had trouble picturing Kenta and Karin fighting as vampires despite having been vampires for less than even a day. I also doubt that any parent would have accepted taking their child into a dangerous situation like that.

I feel like a lot of the chaos during the more hectic passages of your story could have been fixed by slowing it down a bit and describing more what actually happened, as well as who it was that talked. When a large group of several people are in a scene, it quickly becomes confusing as to who is talking at any given moment unless you state it clearly in the narrative.

Taking things slower would have solved many problems, such as the characters getting more time to talk and interact with each other, maybe shove in some fluff scenes between Karin and Kenta or even Anju and Silviu, since you went through the trouble of establishing that pairing. The epilogue also made me curious about how life really goes on for all the characters. Would be especially interesting how the Usuis fared now that they were vamps.
Also, it strikes me as odd that they hadn't considered turning Kenta's mother into a vampire as well. Feels weird to turn your entire family inoo vamps, yet leave your mother in law out, unless she strictly refused the transformation? We would never know.

Well, just my two cents. I think it was a good story and I enjoyed reading it. Hope my ramblings might help you with your future works.

Excellent story and good continuation of the manga.

This is an amazing story!

that's a nice fluff piece.

:D

I wish it weren't over, this story was so awesome! I hope to read a sequel from you after the new year though XD

Oooh it was really cool! Despite that it's pretty mean the way you finished it, yeah, you really left us with few more questions :/ so I hope that you make a sequel :)

great story hope to read a sequel. :)

Well it certainly has been a long time since your last update but I'm not mad. Hopefully this next one doesn't take as long. I sad though that the next chapter is the epilouge, their's so much more that I'd love to see happen with this story. I hope their is a sequel in the future. Great job with this chapter and keep up the amazing work!

Loved the story, can't wait to read more!

No, I can't believe ;.;
Time sure flies eh? It's ending already... But it feels like just yesterday I started reading this fic :( *sigh
Can't wait til next chapter :3

Nice, despite it's a pretty short chapter :S So sad that this fic is ending! I didn't find many fics of Karin like this one :/
Plus, I don't know what you're planing for the next chapter, but I anyway, I had a thought: what if Kanon sleeps for a whole day, or even more, and during the night they go back home, so when she wakes up she forgets what happened, you know, she's pretty sleepy, so it takes a while to remember ( she could even nearly go to school, I don't know ) that now she is also a vampire and all that stuff. It's just a silly idea, but I wanted to share :S
Anyway, I'm loving this fic, and hoping that we still have some more chapters!

Yeah, we need more vampires alive, so we can kill more vampires... what

Ughh school. College is draining me as well. Mostly calculus -.-'

Nice chapter! It even made me laugh a litlle bit ;D