Yeah the story is nice but why being so lazy in writing it you should make new chapters about what's happening next but from all fanfics I read this one is short but it makes me crazy like there's no tomorrow

Fuckin amazing

This story didn't deserve a happy ending. Purely because of basic psychology, Delia openly admitted she didn't think Ash could take care of himself, and used that as a reasonable excuse to essentially force Serena on him. Yes, he did like her, but like I said, when you take away free-will from a person, they will rebel in an attempt to regain control of their own life.

Realistically, Ash should have argued much more fiercely with Delia, saying that he doesn't like her, and he will never see her again. It'd hurt Amourshippers like hell, but it'd be realistic because you can't expect to control other people's lives and not expect blowback. Why do people smoke weed? Because it's fun, then the Government said it wasn't fun, and made it illegal, BOOM it just became 10x more fun because the government tried to control you and you defied them and re-took control!

I'm sorry that I have been more critical about the realism, but for a relationship to be strong and long-lasting, it needs to happen NATURALLY, not forced by a 3rd party. People should have control of their own lives.

Like I said last time, While Delia started out in the right with encouragement and advice... SHE TOOK FUCKING CONTROL! The parent's are taking power and freewill from their children! That is not their job! Ash is stubborn and dense, yes, he needs a bit of a push. But Serena should NOT be learning about Ash's feelings from Delia. Ash needs to discover them on his own, and then tell her, sure it would take some freaking time but when there is pressure on two people to get together from their parents, the teenage feels a need to rebel so they feel in control of their own life, so Delia's overbearing pushing, if this weren't a controlled scenario, would cause Ash to dislike Serena to spite his mother. He'd even confuse his spiteful feelings for real feelings and convince himself that he actually doesn't like her.

Again, don't get me wrong, I want to see Ash and Serena together, but it would be a much stronger relationship if it happened naturally, as opposed to Delia pushing him into her.

All I can say about Grace's story is "STFU you controlling bitch!" So fucking what if you're sure Ash is coming back for her, who wants the exact same love story as their parents? I know I don't my parents got divorced! Honestly, I hope this story ends with Ash dying in a plane crash before he gets a chance to see Serena again, so that Grace can feel like a guilty bitch for not letting her daughter live her own damn life!

Don't get me wrong, I like the story, but Parents don't always know what's best for their kids, especially when it comes to love. They aren't supposed to control the love life, they're supposed to be supporting characters, there to give advice when asked for it and in dire situations when it isn't asked for.

I'm intrigued... but all I really have to say is... SHE'S A POKEMON TRAINER/PERFORMER! WHY DOES SHE NEED TO HAVE HER MOTHER'S PERMISSION TO TRAVEL?! ESPECIALLY WHEN IT'S COMMONLY ACCEPTED FOR KIDS 10 AND OLDER ARE ALLOWED TO TRAVEL ALL ACROSS A FREAKING COUNTRY! IN ASH'S CASE, HE'S GONE SEVERAL DIFFERENT REGIONS ACROSS THE WORLD AND ALL HIS MOTHER REALLY SAYS IS "Be Safe, dont forget to change your underwear!" MOST TRAINERS DON'T NEED PERMISSION, THEY'RE PRACTICALLY CONSIDERED ADULTS WHEN THEY TURN 10! Jesus, I needed to get that off my chest.

Other than that, I think the story is good, 2nd chapter in and although there are some grammar issues, it's nothing too big. I have a feeling right now that you could've made it longer than 5 chapters but I'll see about that in chapter 5.

Good, good. The next story you make about Pokemon, could you add made up characters like a girl called MiJia that is actually a superhero called The Aura Master with a Umbreon and a Riolu. *hint hint wink wink*

Immersing myself in Amourshipping has felt so good, especially with quality feels like the ones in this great little story! I'll definitely look forward to your next one.

This was a good story :) keep up the good work!

This is super CUTE! I LOVE THIS!

Best story I have read in a while! :D

impressive, but please watch your language and use punctuation where it is needed

Great Work.

Great story please make more

I really liked this, please do a sequel