Fantastic epilogue! It tied up loose ends in a very effective fashion.

I'm glad Hiccup saved the other slaves. He wouldn't just leave people in slavery; it just isn't his character, so having him so determined to free the other slaves was a realistic thing to add to the story.

I loved the last two lines. "After all, everywhere he goes, disaster follows. Maybe that's not always a bad thing anymore." That was a great call back to the first movie and is very true. I never really looked at it that way, but it is very true. "A problem at a distance may be a solution up close," (-quote from Disney XD show Randy Cunningham: 9th Grade Ninja) which is definitely the case with Hiccup's ability to cause trouble wherever he goes.

This was an amazing story. A few grammatical errors, and more detail throughout the story couldn't hurt, but overall, the story had a great, well thought out plot line and realistic characterization and best of all... it's a completed story! (I'm terrible at finishing stories, especially in a timely manner, so I applaud those who actually complete their stories).

Loved the story! You did a great job with it.

Great finale! I loved the way you've written Stoick through the entire story. You wrote Stoick so realistically (You definitely write his character better than I can, I'll admit), and you described his emotions in such a raw fashion. Especially the way he wasn't sure if he could ever do his job again. When you have depression, even the simplest tasks are incredibly difficult... chiefing a village? Seems downright impossible when you have depression. That added a whole new level of realism to the story.

The scene with Toothless sleeping with Hiccup wrapped in his wings was a nice touch. I like to think Toothless does that whenever he wants to protect Hiccup, and after everything that's happened, he sure isn't letting his rider out of his sight any time soon.

I'm glad Fin has returned home. I hope he and Hiccup and the other slaves keep in touch, though. After their ordeal, their friendship should be stronger than steel.

The ending lines were amazing and well written. The reference to A Portrait Of Hiccup As A Buff Young Man (Riders of Berk... episode 8 if I remember right) was a great detail. "For only a Hiccup could get this far. From one to another, be proud of who you are." -A Portrait Of Hiccup As A Buff Young Man (one of the best quotes from Riders Of Berk). That was a great detail/reference to add.

Great story! It's wrapped up nicely, and I'm sure the epilogue will tie up any loose ends in a very Hiccup-y fashion.

YES! He's home! The moment we've all been waiting for.

You really did the reunion scene justice. Not too rushed but not too drawn out either, which was great. I think the Hiccstrid was well placed. I myself am not a huge fan of Hiccstrid (or romance in general), but I'm fine with a little bit of it. What I liked about it in this story is that you didn't have romance take over the story; you added a little bit, but you made sure the romance wasn't the center of the story, which I really liked. In my opinion, stories that are 100% romance and drama are kind of two dimensional, so I'm glad you didn't let that happen with this story. You kept the friendship and the adventure and the character development as the main focuses and just added a little bit of romance on the side.

Amazing reunion chapter! I can't wait to see him reunite with his dad in the next chapter.

Amazing chapter! I'm glad Maldrigard got what he deserved. All this time, he's been enslaving runts and treating them horribly, and now, a bunch of runts defeated him. Seems fitting.

That part about the Red Death was creative. I was not expecting that and was very surprised when I read that scene.

As for the slave mark, I'm glad they destroyed it in order to be free. I wish Hiccup hadn't received a slave mark but obviously, every slave would have received one in those days, so him having a slave mark added realism to the story.

That detail about Hiccup looking more powerful and stronger than ever was awesome. It really brought the chapter together because it summed up the theme: appearances aren't everything. The strongest can be the smallest. Hiccup is twice as strong and powerful as Alvin or Maldrigard, and yet, he's a third of their size, and all of that was summed up in this one line. I liked that you added that line.

They're finally free! I'm so happy for them.

Best chapter! The dragon scene was worth the wait.

I loved the dragons you created, especially the Flamehuffer. A dragon that can imitate a human's voice was a cool idea, and I think it is a great dragon for Fin. Fin is skittish (he tries to act like he's not, but he is), so a gentle dragon is the best bet for him. I also loved the idea of the Flamehuffer calling all the dragons nearby. That was an awesome idea, and I could really visualize the scene because of the way it was described. It definitely seemed like a scene that could've actually happened in Riders/Defenders Of Berk.

Great chapter! Can't wait to see the other slaves' (I almost forgot they split into two groups until the end of the chapter) reactions to their friends riding in on the dragons.

Yes, they're finally go to figure out that Hiccup is the Dragon Conquerer!

That plan with the Outcasts, tying them up like that, was absolutely brilliant and was definitely a plan worthy of Hiccup. Awesome job on coming up with that plan!

I've been so excited for the dragon scene since the beginning, so I'm going to move onto the next chapter to read it.

Great chapter! I especially loved the little girl you added and how Hiccup tried to comfort her.

Another great chapter! I like Fin's character because even if he doesn't intend to, he stills ends up being the comic relief ("both frees are alive frees, though, right?")

My favorite part was when Hiccup kind of tricked Winston into putting that contraption together. It was a clever plan for Hiccup to inspire Winston and a very Hiccup-worthy plan.

Fantastic chapter! Even though some parts of this story were a little dark, most of it seemed like something that could have actually happened during Riders/Defenders Of Berk, which is awesome!

The escape plan's kicking off. I'm not even sure if the twins ever received names, but I still love their characters. As for how the twins tricked the Outcasts, that seems like something that would've happened on Riders/Defenders of Berk. You kept the Outcasts in character, complete with all that Outcast stupidity and their bickering.

Another great chapter! A few typos, but nothing too major. Moving onto the next chapter!

The plan's been put into action. You definitely captured Hiccup's strategy skills in this chapter. Hiccup is a clever strategist, and he knows how to delegate duties to other people in order to effectively pull off a plan, and you did a good job of demonstrating that in this chapter.

Great job. There were no major errors that I noticed either. Amazing chapter!

Well, that was a bit of a disturbing scene at the end there, but still, a very clever plan that scared Savage witless. The twins have only been in this story a couple of times, but I already love them.

I'm also excited because I know we're getting closer to the moment when Fin and the others find out about Hiccup being the Dragon Conquerer.

Great job on the description in this chapter!

I loved the call back to the earlier chapter with Fin and Hiccup's roles reversed! That was a unique and interesting idea to see. Hiccup is inspiring the other slaves now that Fin has inspired him. I love inspiring!Hiccup; one of Hiccup's prime qualities is his ability to inspire others and give them hope, even when there doesn't seem to be any, and that has been a big part of this story.

Oddly enough, Alvin might lead Stoick and the others straight to Hiccup. In the words of Tuffnut, "That much irony should be illegal."

That was a really sad chapter and a bit hard to read, but it added realism to the story. Besides, in order to write a good character, the hero needs to have downfalls and failures, things that want to make them give up. That will only make their character more likeable when they manage to rise again, despite all of the odds being stacked against them.

Not much constructive critisicism except for this: Hiccup's character should be more sarcastic because he uses sarcasm and quips as a shield. Maybe he wouldn't have been able to be sarcastic in this situation, but in other chapters, sarcasm would be a key component of Hiccup's characterization.

Other than that, though, great chapter. Like I said, hard to read, but a scene like this provided some depth to Hiccup's character and realism to the story. Good job!

Another great chapter! I think you did a fantastic job with Stoick's thoughts in the beginning, keeping his worry realistic and his thoughts true to his character.

The part about the twins was funny, and more OCs are being introduced, not too many at once but just a few to start adding some more dimension to the story, which is great.

I liked the scene with Hiccup, Fin, and Maldrigard. It was angsty and sad, yes, but it also made the story more realistic, and... everyone loves it a little bit when their favorite characters get hurt, even though some won't admit it*laughs sheepishly.* But I'm glad that angsty scene was followed by a hopeful conversation between Fin and Hiccup.

Only one major thing to point out: I recommend putting a line break to seperate the first section about Stoick and Astrid from where it switches over to Hiccup, Fin, and the other slaves.

Amazing chapter!

Well, at least Hiccup shouldn't get hurt too bad, but I'm wondering what kind of work Hiccup will be put to. Farming, blacksmithing, cleaning? Guess I'll find out in the next few chapters.

Good chapter, loved the scene where Hiccup and Fin met the other slaves. I especially loved Fin and Hiccup's dialogue during that scene. For one, when Hiccup said 'would you stop that?' it resembled when he snapped at Fishlegs while they were facing the Zippleback in the movie, which I'm assuming is what you were going for. And the parts about the 'abandoned beds of the lost slaves' and 'maybe it's a slave's ghost' made me laugh a lot harder than they should have.

Only two major spelling mistakes: in the sentence Hiccup's house times five, there's a typo. Instead of Hiccup's, it says Hiccup;s. And a few of Hiccup's names had typos where the H and the I were capitilized, like HIccup instead of Hiccup.

Overall, very good chapter, and you're kicking off the plot nicely. I also liked that you added that part where Hiccup tried to inspire Fin. It was very true to Hiccup's character. Great job!

Good chapter so far! I'll admit, I was surprised when Maldrigard bought Hiccup instead of Alvin, but as frightening as Hiccup's situation is now that he's technically owned by a merciless slave owner, I'm glad he and Fin stayed together. I'm starting to like Fin's character.

Also, I have a feeling that Alvin is not going to let Hiccup get away (if you can call it that) that easily.

I liked that you included the part about the rumors surrounding Maldrigard. It definitely added even more mystery to his character and increased the suspense.

I can't wait until Fin finds out Hiccup's the infamous 'Dragon Conquerer'. That will be an awesome reaction on Fin's part, I'm sure.

Great chapter! Moving onto the next one.