"I...I cant see it!I–I... I cant see anything but blackness,...I've never had this happen before."

Me: Ha! What fucking is this, Reckoning?

I read the start somewhere before...
But this sounds nice,it’s too bad you seem to have never finished it. XD

I like the Q&A thing at the ending.

Aloha, there!
First of all, please be aware that it might make the impression that Im really unhappy with this story. However, thats not true, I liked this story. Im hoping that it is more helpful if I focus more on the critic than on the praise, and well here comes my impression:
1)Chapter names: Therere creative! When I look at the title, the name Hana and the chapter names it really fits well together, and its informative in two ways: The reader learns about the flowers and the flowers meaning always gives a hint about whats going to happen- it kind of adds to the dramatics.
2)Characters: Every character is very interesting, I especially love the way Shoichi always uses these daily life comparison, I mean, a hopeless tissue box? An unused piece of toilet paper? Thats gold! It is a bit hard to keep track of all Ocs but well, Hana doesnt know them yet.
On the other hand, there are so many mysteries that I sometimes wonder if they are all going to be solved, some examples: Why didnt Yamamoto and Kyoko look into Hanas disappearance more? Why did Fuuta go to Shoichi in the first place? Even if he had the ability to look into the future, he needs to touch the person to do it, and Shoichi cant protect Fuuta. And the most important question: Will Hana change over the story? After living through things like Mafia/drug dealing, people think and change- or at least, I hope she will change because the way she always faults other people for her situation, doesnt trust her friends, and has a generally pessimistic outlook on life is sad. She seems so inflexible and unmovable like a petulant stone wall.
3)Plot: It is remarkable how original your plot is. The way your story doesnt care about Cannon KHR makes it confusing, yes, but it also leaves a greater mystery. The problem I see is that as a reader I dont really feel the need to know these mysteries. Only after thinking it through, I realised that there are so many things unsolved. The only thing which I would consider implausible is that whole “fear-system”. I mean if the higher beings can delete all memories what stops them to delete the fears too? The rebirth made the impression that nothing carries over to Hana- apart from the fears which are even in Hanas eyes unreasonable. Fear is irrational but most times all our fears have some kind of root, or are about something concrete, like Im scared of spiders because they might kill me. Not Im scared of guns because there are guns. This is the only problem I had with the plot so far- but as it is at the beginning it isnt a big problem, I would say…
4)Writing: Very impressive writing- occasionally a bit description-heavy, other times I would love to know something more precise. For example, how Hanas facial expression looks like when she is scared. Scared looking could mean parted lips, lips which are pressed together, wide eyes, or with her personality maybe her eyes actually narrow when she is scared? Because seriously I dont know what a scared looking face in her case would be like.

Okay! Thats kind of all, and sorry again that I focused so much on the critic- I read this story to the end because I enjoyed it, and not because I wanted to hate on it xD

Anyways, have a nice day/night!

This is definetly one of the most unique OC inserts I've read. You're not relying on stages of canon and while confusing, your world is also fascinating.

very good

Hana's trainwreckness is starting to get annoying. It's almost like she has absolutely no control emotion-wise. I mean really? Basically threatening to kill some boy just because he hinted at something about Fuuta? I do enjoy the direction this is going in plotwise-like how she's no longer under the thumb of Paulo, for example. Though I guess an argument could be made that since she didn't escape willingly, mentally she still is. Which is more interesting. But ugh, at this point slowly but surely what interested me to Hana is being charred out. Because while she's always been a character with flaws, what with the temper to hide her insecurity, she's still been good inside, and the things she really got worked up about had merit. Granted, not much, but at its core, they did. Now, however, she's overreached herself and became dislikeable. Silvano is irritating me as well. I can't believe I'm saying this, but I miss Gokudera. He was a good foil to her, because she wasn't blind to his faults like she sometimes seems to be silvanos, letting the latter get away with more things. This story is still really good writing wise and plotwise, but I'm wondering whether its still the story for me. Ah well. It was a good trip while it lasted, and I'm surely still going to read the next chapters to see whether there will be any character progression. So I guess, update soon?

Read this in one go and it was good.

So many questions that need answers , I wonder when the story will start to pick up ...

Such a good start!

I really like the backstory, it was refreshing.

Great first chapter!

I haven't been checking up on this story, but I'm glad I did today. What you're doing with it is possibly turning into my favorite fanfiction out there. I hope you continue soon!

[I'm sorry I don't have much to say: I'm in class right now.]

YOUR CLIFFHANGERS KILL ME

OH

MY

GOD.

Let's start off at the beginning. THIS CHAPTER FUCKING HIT THE GROUND RUNNING. It gave into a lot of character development for Paulo, even when you were only a few paragraphs in you could see how much his reputation and how much the business really means to him. I honestly didn't know what he would do. Second, this is nearing the end but when Soichi said he felt hopeless, I just wanted to hug him since he's a personal favorite! This chapter brought and delivered the drama and development we've been waiting for, its like when you order something on amazon but you have to choose standard shipping, and when you finally get it and hold it and read it its like time meant nothing? (Does that even make sense?) . I loved how it gave a nod to all the characters and like, you could feel everyone's emotions in this chapter. My only advice is to please not let this be a shoo-in for Hana to take over the Todd Familiga, but like you said in Q/A and based on your previous writing, I don't think that's something I should worry about ;)

OVERALL:
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* Definetly five stars on character development, you were able to take us into there thought process without getting off track.

*Vocabulary as always , you get the gold on those descriptions.

*I think this is a personal favorite chapter and its only gotten me even more excited for the next!

Keep it up and I am beyond pleased and proud!

ARE YOU SERIOUS YOU CANT LEAVE IT LIKE THAT

UPDATE SOON YOU HAVE TO!