Just finished the chapter. I've read a number of fanfictions and have realistic standards. After all, these aren't licensed novels. I'll try to keep the review short, I'm not sure what the limit is. The grammar was good, the story changes were something I like but there were some serious glaring problems. You seemed to have put Hiccup's personality in Astrid, changed her personality FAR too much. It did not fit. You made her appear too weak. One other nit picky issue is you kept changing the Deadly Nadder's gender. Aside from that, it's good so far. There is one more thing that bothered me. The use of movie quotes verbatim can be charming and have its placed when used in small doses. You used it excessively which kind of took away from the creative flair of the story and I felt you could have completely rewritten them. One of the biggest cases was giving Hiccup's line to Astrid. It did not fit her, while it was a cute touch and can be somewhat charming to the casual reader it did not fit her personality at all. She wouldn't necessarily say that kind of thing and wouldn't cave to Stoic the way Hiccup had regardless of how intimidated she is. Otherwise, so far it's an okay fanfic. Not great, but okay. I've seen far worse. Considering this was posted in 2014 I hope you've improved since then. There is definite potential.

When I started with this fanfiction I wasn't expecting much to be honest. It's the expectation I go in with reading many of the fanfictions in this site because, after all, they're not licensed novels. But this one is pretty good. There are some serious flaws, the grammar is good although it isn't flowing and the use of a bigger diction is somewhat lacking. The spelling errors I've found also can't be helped. Everyone is human and they even exist in licensed books. As for my problems with this fanfiction the characterization of Astrid is a big one. You write her far too weak, far too dependent on Hiccup and although I get you're going for a romance it could have been done far better. She could have still kept her strength and not been crying every time she was alone without Hiccup, that made her feel too weak in my opinion and the way you kind of swapped personalities with the two did not fit her at all. It strayed way too far away from canon. One other issue I had was the use of movie quotes. One or two included in the entirety of the fanfic can have its charm but when it's used liberally there are some serious issues. One glaring issue I have is the scene where Astrid spills the beans to Stoic about the dragon nest and how to find it. Using Hiccup's line was a HUUUUGE problem in my mind. Instead of quoting his lines verbatim you could have rewritten it entirely. His lines aren't her lines and her personality didn't fit them at all. Otherwise, so far, this is an okay fanfic. I'm halfway through this chapter right now and have yet to finish the actual story as far as the movie is concerned but this could have been done better. This is of course 5 years after the story has been completed so I hope you've improved since then.

Did she know about toothless or not in this story

Ch 35 Honestly with that...those deceptions and ĹIES I MOSTLY HATE BERK WANTING TO BE FIRE AND ASH IN THE WIND OF THE GUILTY.

Ch 33 THE ONLY DISTINGUISHINGTHINGS BETWEEN THE HUMAN RACE AND THE ANIMAL KINGDOM ARE THAT THEY LIVE WAY MORE SIMPLE AND MUCH LESS LIES AND DECEPTION. BUT I'M A WAY AS THE SECOND MORE SUPERIOR SPECIES ARE THE DRAHONS RACE AND TOOTHLESS WITH HICCUP NO MATTER OF THE PAST HE HAS THE SAME MORAL OR SIMILAR TO THAT BECAUSE HICCUP AND IN THAT WAY I SAY HE IS PRETTY MUCH WITH SIMILARITY TO HUMAN MIND BUT DAMN SMART AND SO THE OTHERS MORE THAN THE VIKINGS maybe and that is why I prefer stories when he could talk or his race or someone deserving to understand what are saying as their voice.

Ch 31
The least PUNISHMENT FOR BERK IS ALL BERK EXCEPT GOTHY AND GOBBER TO BE SHAVED WITH DULL SHAVERS BALD AND NO BEARDS OR HAIR BECAUSE THAT WAS THE DIGNITY IT MUST HURT THERE.

Ch 20
The only way to defeat thing like that is like the ants trying to kill a bird ,If they couldn't injure it with weapons outside to get in the natural openings inside and do internal injuries and survive long enough

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Ch 4 What are You Planing RED BEARD OGRE/TROLL BEAST ?!

HICCUP WOULD ITHER SUICIDE OR DELETE/REPRESS THE MEMORY CAUSE ANESIA UNTIL IT HAPPENS AGAIN.

Wonderful story, some small parts that could use grammar and word changes but overall beautiful. I haven't read something like this in a long time.

Toothless, I'm a human myself, and I agree that they are complex creatures. But CAAAN YOU FEEEEEEEEL THE LOOOOOOOVE TOOOOOONIIIIIGHT ** TOOOOOONNIIIIGHT

OHHHH MYYYY GOOOOOOOOOOOODS I LOVE STOICK, BUT SERIOUSLY? GET A GRIP, YOU OLD MAN! THOR ALMIGHTY! Anyway love the chapter :3

Toothless better be there or I am so going to kill you!

YES! YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES YES! TOOTHLESS ISN'T DEAD! I LOVE YOU AGAIN!

HOW DARE YOU KILL TOOTHLESS!

Stoic stupit idiot , You didn't saw so mutch , ok You saw the bond and if You think that Hicup will change he'll never , He may ssuicide or escape but he'll never be a dragon killer when he saw the othe side
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