This was pretty interesting. I really liked the relationship with Elsa and Anna, not just romantically, but also the way that Elsa is kind of like Anna's mentor. Her experience - Anna's coming to terms with her new life. I'd love to see that expanded on and continued. :) I saw you say you were going to write more, but I checked your profice and didn't see any others... I hope you still consider it, you have a good imagination.

Brilliantly written, nothing needs to be added or taken away from the story. I also agree with your ending A/N ...the implications that Elson a will have a romantic future is more appropriate for the tone of this story than trying to force it in where it doesn't belong.

Aly arrogance is his own downfall as with most villains...never underestimate someone abilities...no matter how insignificant they seem.

Ch 3 was well done also...I saw that you had doubt about it. All 4 chapters did what they needed to do...which made it into a nice little gem.

Thanks for sharing.

Yay! Is there going to be a sequel?

I thought the punishment/torture was rather light, so not sadistic :)

YAAAAHHHZZZZZ VAMPIRES WOOO AND ALYK IS DEAD WELL KINDA BUT CLOSE ENOUGH FOR ME AHAHAHA YOURE AWESOME BTW DID I EVER TELL YOU THAT EH?

BEEN A WONDERFUL RIDE! THANKS SO MUCH! ILU!

I actually really love the way you did this and I totally agree with the speed of Elsa and Annas relationship. I think you did a great job and I can't wait to see some more stories from you.

Ahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh! No you can't end it yet! how dare you... *sniff sniff* ...no smut?

vamps and these twoawsomeness

So, just as a little nudge now, when can we be expecting another chapter o' Great One? :

I love this, MORE ELSANNA! I'm loving this forbidden romance you have going on even when they're prisoners of such a twisted man. Wow Anna's going to try to kill Alyk already? I guess I expected them to fully become lovers first. Can't wait for more this is really good!

Well this just got even more interesting!

Love this fic, can't wait for it to update. And there aren't a lot of grammatical errors so good job -

This fic is really good, I find I'm very intrigued to find out about Elsa'a past and why she has not just killed the deplorable Alyk. I look forward to his demise and the further development of the girls relationship and how they will react to a world without a cruel and controlling maker!

KILLING ALYK FUCK YEAH GIMME DIS HE IS SUCH A JERK HE MUST DIE OMG CANT WAIT FOR MORE

I really enjoyed this chapter. I hope Anna kills that bastard and makes him pay!