come on wheres ch 7

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Welcome back to the living world Bardock

Okay, you've got me hooked. Tell me more! It's a really funny reality you've created. I just wish ther was no impending doom, but thats the series i supose

and goku just said, 'Dad save some food.' HAHHAHAHAHHAHAHAHHAHAHHAh

Well, Chi-Chi said she'd be the best wife ever. Of course knowing Goku's appetite, she'd learn to cook really well... and a lot. XD
I still think you lack a few things. For one, Goku's reaction to his father is kinda... not what I'd expect. Some parts go by too fast and it's hard to picture what goes on, making me use my imagination to extend the scene even more than what it should be. Perhaps you can make chapters longer? It'd be great, cause I'm running by these chapters faster than Sonic.

Other than that I really love the story. Keep it going!

PLEASE CARRY ON WITH CHAPTER 7 I LOVE IT

i hope your not giving up

please carry on IM LOVIN IT

update next chapter please and write in structural sentences and paragraphs thats the reason why you are not getting high reviews

keep going im lovin it

Oooh. I love this I just started reading and its wonderful. Keep the updates coming.

Not quite sure what to say. The story has potential to become great. But… it's not quite there yet. Almost. I think it needs more punctuation.

I think Bardock should've had more of reaction to Vegeta. After all, he is the Prince of Saiyans. And if you want him to not like the royals, you should have a reason, like, he witnessed all the crap Vegeta did since his arrival on earth. And Vegeta should've been interested in the survival of another Saiyan since he doesn't know about Bardock being brought back?

As a matter of fact, I think Bardock should've had more of a reaction towards everyone.

Gohan should've been distrustful towards him. Judging from his past with Saiyans. And what about Goten? Shouldn't he have been shy since he was shy when he met Goku?

And wouldn't all the Z-Fighter have felt Bardock's power level when he transformed into a Super Saiyan? Where'd Bardock get a ship from if he was dead? And if Bardock has been dead for thousands of years (If he was the one that started the legend, he'd be thousands of years old), and in hell, wouldn't he train to pass time? He should be the strongest being in the universe by far. Unless he did absolutely nothing in that time.

Oh, and you had the power level for Goten way off. What you have is barely stronger than Raditz.

Ah, but who cares? Don't let this review dissuade you from continuing the story. Keep on going!

I would like to see things get heated between Vegeta and Bardock...maybe they both turn super saiyan.

Good chapter