please update for the love of god

Hi there, I think the idea is good, your first chapter has ended well even though there were some slight grammatical errors but that isn't too big a deal when English isn't your first language! You've captured some of the characters like I remember them in the show, I can really imagine them saying it! Look forward to the next chapter
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Alright, I'm here to review as promised.

The summary has certainly caught my interest. I dunno, maybe it's because I've never seen stories with "machines that can completely destroy a digimon's data" so it sounds pretty interesting to me. I'm curious as to how these machines came about. Did they come out of thin air? Did someone (or some group) build them? If so, how? And why? The possibilities are endless.

The next thing I saw is the "war between two species". Does that mean there's another new species in this universe other than human and digimon? Because it sounds like that to me. Maybe there's a hybrid? Or is this solely a human VS digimon thing? Hmm, interesting...

What I feel lacking is the tension. This is supposedly a dark story but I don't really feel that kind of bleak atmosphere. I've noticed that your sentences are all quite long and complex. Don't be afraid to write short sentences. They add more tension.

For example: [He looked at the ice digimon as he could hear noises and guessed the enemy was close by.] could be written as: [He heard footsteps coming. The enemy must be close by. His heartbeat suddenly increased tenfold as he turned to look at the ice digimon, lines of distress forming on his face.] As you can see, the first two sentences are short to emphasize on the impending danger. The last one is long to describe Veemon's feelings, as well as to give the sentences more variety. But don't worry! You'll improve as you keep practising.

Dialogue tags (eg. said, asked, cried, yelled, etc.) only serve the purpose of identifying a speaker. Using too many of them disrupts the flow of the story. If you have an action before or after a dialogue, it is understood that the dialogue belongs to the person performing that action, so a dialogue tag isn't needed.

For example: ["Let's get moving then," Veemon agreed with Patamon, smiling a little.] could be written as: ["Let's get moving then." Veemon smiled a little.]

That said, I like how you fleshed out the digimons' friendship. It's clear that they all have a close bond and care for one another a lot. I also like the fact that you weaved in the crests' meanings to their corresponding digimon. It was very nicely done.

Sorry if I sounded harsh or anything. I like to make random guesses when I review too, just to satisfy my own curiosity. Heheh. But overall, this is a nice opening, especially for a first fic. Good luck writing!

Cheers,
LittleKrus.

Really good story so far. Concept is interesting and it'll be interesting to see how it develops. Overall, though, I liked it.

This is one of the more noble Digimon stories I've read since discovering them on this site.
The idea comes through strongly that the digital creatures are a cooperative unit who recognize they're better together than any of them could be separately.
There are so many unselfish acts. Even Centuramon, who outraged the others by agreeing to Wormmon's suggestion that they leave him behind, jumped in front of them all and took the first hit.
Agumon and Gabumon staying back to give the others the opportunity to reach the real world is admirable, as is the determination of those going
through to get help for them immediately.
The mention of the human friends was interesting and your story might help me understand better how exactly they help the Digimon. It's always (that is, for the last year I've read Digi stories) irritated me that the trainers just seem to push buttons and send the creatures in to fight. Their anxiousness to return to the humans though suggests that they do serve a vital function.
I hope there will be more of this story to help explain what that might be.

So quick reviews since I have my own stuff to get to.
I have no idea what you mean by 'My English isn't very good' since you don't show any signs of English being a second language in your writing since your grammar, for the most part, is good.
Main problem; details.
Your sentences structure, while basic, is at least legible, but your word choice, while decent enough, isn't anything amazing. For example, you're clearly very close to falling into the 'said' trap. better words like pleaded, begged, cried, whimpered, sobbed, demanded, inquired, pondered, etc. could be used to better convey emotions.
And some parts just aren't clear, or are lacking detail. Example; Centarumon gets killed, we have no idea what happened. Yes, it's clear he's dead, but not one word was dedicated to what killed him other than it being an attack that, while when re-reading the description and chapter I can imply it's from the 'machine' or 'Darkness'. But, for someone else who either doesn't remember the exact description or rather vague introduction, the attack could've come from hammerspace for all they know. Now don't get me wrong, sometimes you really do want to be vague or have something happen suddenly. But you should at least give hints to the source, or say that they couldn't find said source, since whatever that was is clearly ready to snipe them off.
And the 'Darkness' at the start is overly vague, since you really give about two sentences to describing it. Once again, it's always fun to have a surprise, but you could have given a bit more, maybe describing the desecration it's caused. We have no idea what it is, what its goals are, what it has done other than barely implied mass-destruction, and if it's just Digimon that are in trouble or if the entire world is in danger, along with several other things. Feel free to leave most of these blank until the plot demands for the truth to be reviled, but at least some kind of description, background, goal, or something should be given. Just enough to differentiate it from the 'darkness' every cannon season of Digimon has, especially considering all but one has at least two sources of evilly generic 'darkness'.

So, in summary; this story has potential to be at least decent. And while it's only one chapter in and really not fair to judge, I'm grading what I've got since you've asked me. So far I haven't seen a single thing that makes it stand out above the masses of other stories that are published every day. Nothing has really grabbed my interest, and not because it's 'bad', but because I've seen the exact same thing done for first chapters all the time, so it's hard to stick out.
Premise has been done before, but I can see about a dozen different directions you could take it in, so that's not a huge worry. As for you, don't worry about not getting love or reviews or what have you for this story, since almost all 02 stories get attention, and your selection for the main characters will draw some more people in.

Good prologue, i wonder who's the enemy? update soon please, i'll read it

Well, for a first Fic, it's kinda okay, for length and all. First thing is, I like how the details of thoughts and actions, you described them well. Yeah, for a drama-oriented fic, this sure had some depth of darkness, and there's some bits of soap opera things. And you made the Digimons true to their canon personality.

Well, I think that's all for now. Hopefully we can see this updated, or marked as complete.

Not bad for a first fic. Something causing permanent deletion is a terrifying foe, b/c usually you can at least come back later. Is something, or someone, trying to wipe out the Digital World?

So it looks like we're thrust into the middle of everything, which is certainly exciting, but I wish there was a little more explanation for what's going on, or at least how the situation started. Some redundant sentences slow things down unintentionally, as well as unneccessary POV-hopping. If a POV change lasts only for a paragraph or two, it's probably not worth it.

Also, why even consider leaving Wormmon behind? Wormmon's not that big, and can easily be carried by one of the bigger Digimon.

This seems to be very good.