I'm a simple man, i see haku in the pairing I shout "I'll take your entire stock"

I’m at chapter 5 so almost halfway through and pretty much NOTHING has happened! Aside from the kidnapping and Naruto meeting this tenant. Everything is far to long winded and you really need to take advantage of time skips, because if the MC is still 5-6yrs old halfway through a book almost 300k that there’s something wrong. And on top of that, the Uchiha massacre happened 7 years to early! And Anko wasn’t portrayed as nearly the right age considering that she was approximately in her late 20s during the Chunnin exams. It’s a shame because for once I’m reading a story where I don’t have to wince and force myself to ignore the multitude of grammar and spelling mistakes but everything is just too long winded

WHY MAKE KURAMA A FUCKING GIRL -.- What did that poor Boi did to you?! Really its disgusting.

Heeeeey!

I LOVE the idea of a Cold War in the world of Naruto. Never thought about it before, you are a genius.

You have said that this story is very slow but in my opinion, you are just going at a constant pace with some time jumps while the anime and/or manga sometimes goes too fast.

I'm loving the story and there are A LOT of different scenes.
In your first chapter you said that there probably were too much descriptions but I'm comfortable with it.
Also, you combine very well the descriptions with the action and with the transmission of emotions, so it's a bit long on the description side but it's bearable and it strains the mind just a bit, by the fourth I'll probably be accustomed.
About the spelling and grammar check, I've seen some errors... ok, a lot of errors, but they are, in a kind of sense, overwhelmed by the sheer size of each chapter, and they are also not very bad and not very repeated so, you pass. I value the size over some spelling errors.

Great job please continue

I enjoyed this story originally. Can't say i care for what it has become. I mean, it feels like all the relationships Naruto built in the first half of the story were meaningless now. I hardly feel like I'm reading the same story. You replaced almost all character interaction with Naruto and Itachi. I much preferred how things were before and don't care for this new direction.

ok man
This is an AWESOME story! I love the way you basically had Hiruzen create the Shinobi version of the C.I.A. and then gave it the green light to do whatever needed doing. Please don't leave us hanging just when the good stuff is starting to kick off. the build up was great, character building excellent, now you have begun to string it all together into an AWESOME AU, where Naruto take his enemies down one peg at a time until they find themselves alone without help. I can't wait to see if he takes Orocimaru down before or during the Chunin exams, or will he take down Danzo first?

more damn so good nice build up and character development

Everything seemed to be progressing slowly but steadily...then this chapter happened.

From what I have read in the past three days, the way you have it started is that it looks like you'll have it paired up as NaruXHinaXInoXSaku. In all honesty the final say is you, I'd personally like it too stay as NaruXHinaXHakuXAnko. Hope too see more from you, I'm really enjoying this.

5 years... 13 years old...
Can you even count?

Great story m8, it did get kinda slow in some parts and I even got a little lost with their ages and such. But damn, some moments got super intense and brutal! Naruto's and Hinata's relationship is so darn pure and heartwarming and I can't wait until they are finally together. I also wouldn't mind if sakura joined the harem. Although I admit I was pretty disappointed when Ino still ended up choosing sasuke over naruto even though they had history together and was one of Naruto's first friends. I hope she ends up changing her mind and ends up joining the other girls in the harem. And PLEASE don't remove Anko from the harem. Even though her and Naruto haven't met yet since they both lost their memories, I already feel like their connection is extremely deep and would love for them to finally end up together after everything they've been through. And I wonder what will happen to Itachi, will you have Tsunade come in and heal him? I really like the sibling relationship he has with Naruto and it would be very heartbreaking if he ended up dying. Can't wait for the next update! :D

I have only just found this story and I have not read the previous version of this story. I have just caught up and have really enjoyed it so far and have a few suggestions and remarks. Sorry for how long it is.

I really love the length of the story and the tempo for how it is evolving. The depth you go with describing the story is great with background and scene setting I would just cut back on how much you describe what people are wearing... at least when there is so much else being described and going on. When you bring someone in only describe their look if you are making a major change from the story.

I think Kakashi should confront Naruto just so He can get slapped down as the Hokage's Dragon Anbu lapdog. He can show his lack of trust in him regardless of being his fathers student. This will show that he know his heritage and hopefully spur Kakashi to see things from his side and prove himself to him... or not either way.

With Naruto and Hinata I hope you are just making Naruto stubborn about finally getting together with her. Because you have done a great job of setting up their connection and giving her a bit of a backbone and self-confidence that seems to be getting stronger as time goes by.

WHAT EVER YOU DO PLEASE DO NOT REMOVE ANKO FROM THE HAREM! If you want Sakura in it add her but I wouldn't. I would have Anko, Hinata and Ino no matter what. You have written them into the story too much to have them seperated from him. I figure you might add a few others just please don't go adding a ridiculous amount. He should have at least 2 wives Anko(Namikaze) & Hinata(Uzumaki) and then a few Concubines (Ino Yamanaka). The wives take his name and concubines continue their clan names in his village.

This way your not trying to pull whole clans out of their villages which is highly unlikely to happen anyway. Loyalties run deep and it shouldn't be easy to pull ninjas away (except the Hyuga branch family and the Uchiha) This gives him recognized clans for his village and keeps connections to their original village and family. You could even have them evolve clan disciplines along similar but different lines. It also helps with diplomacy and trade outside his shadow operations.

I hope you are going to keep Itachi alive (healed by Tsunade) which I think is a great idea by the way. He and Sauske can reconcile after the villages part in the massacre is revealed and then continue their clan in Uzu with Naruto. Itachi can marry Kurenai (Hinata's sensei/surrogate mother or big sister follows her) and Sauske and Sakura of course and maybe Tenten too.

I hope you like my ideas and I look forward to more!