Not bad story but this definitely need a good beta. This doesnt necessarily have to he chapter length story or perfect, but grammar and sentence structures need to be smooth out. I just felt this story has chunky sentence, if that makes sense?

This was a pretty depressing story.

I think you should add 'horror' to the classification of this story as all the cruelty against children implied in this story is pure horror that many readers, myself included, don't want to encounter (thanks for your warning about the early chapter re harry's mistreatment, i skipped that chapter).

Damn you for making me tear up at the end there

I'm Coming Home has potential to be a good story. It has elements that are intriguing, but not explored, such as:
• What are the cases Sirius and James work together?
• Why don't we hear of the missing kids until more than halfway through the story?
• Why is the plot to bring back Voldemort a thing? How would the Death Eaters have brought him back before they heard of Harry? Did the Death Eaters have a hand in Harry dimension hopping?
• How did DD Vernon deal with the aftermath of finding Harry in his kitchen?
• What happened to BD? Did Voldemort completely take over since Harry isn't there to defeat him when he's older?
I'm Coming Home also needs a lot of editing. The block of text explaining DD in the first chapter could have been incorporated into the story. I found it to be quite annoying that Astraea's dialogue was written in baby-speak, and then was translated so the reader could understand. There are also unclear parts of the story due to poor word choice, and some names are misspelled; Dirt Monkey/Money, Grimmauld/Grimlard Place, and Eynsworth, which has a variety of spellings.
I also felt like the end was rushed. Jordan, Penelope, and Harry are rescued from Malfoy Manor, and it's Christmas, and the only one now opposing Voldemort's return is Dumbledore. We don't see how Harry heals from his kidnapping and the trauma he dealt with both in BD and Malfoy Manor, even though the effects of the abuse in BD is a major focus until he's kidnapped.

umm... so James and etc is run away from war and kindnap Draco from his parent? anyways, how Petunia there? she is not related with way as she muggle and how about her family? i am confusing. but good ending. Another fic to make me hate Dumbledore.

Finally they're know about Harry! 10 chaptera for this scene finally come, sigh.. but at last james anf Lily know

Lily words make me cry. Mummy coming, Harry!

so touching at last part

This story was amazing!️️️️️️️I’m so glad you finished it, I just wish there was a chapter about the future when Harry is older amd a bit more trusting towards others*cough,lily,cough* otherwise, LOVE IT

OK, nevermind, you can ignore my first review! This slow reveal of what's going on with the back & forth is AMAZING!

I like the premise of the story so far, it's different...and I've read an extensive amount of fanfiction. However, just the blurb in the A/N at the beginning isn't quite enough to keep the beginning from being a big "what the heck am I reading?"

I'm hoping as the story progresses we get some flashbacks with background information leading up to what actually happened. Otherwise, I recommend a detailed pre-quel story that has Lily/Petunia growing up witches together. Sirius being married with a kid already is definitely something to read about, as it's OOC for the character in my brain.

Looking forward to more!

loved this story.

Merlín. Que hermosa historia, me encantó. Me alegra que Harry se apegara de esa forma a James. Me parece muy tierno. Lloré en muchos capítulos, junto con Lily y James. Estoy segura que Harry se abrirá a los demás, o eso pienso yo.

Cuando encontré tu historia en ''El Universo Alternativo de Harry Potter Travel'' fundado por lovly-pink, me emocioné mucho. Al entrar al fanfic me fijé la fecha, y pegué un salto de felicidad al ver que está completo. Tardé un día completo en leerlo, en serio. Ya es de noche, y sigo llorando como magdalena, tengo los ojos rojos, pero estoy increíblemente satisfecha.

Es uno de los mejores fanfics que he leído. Agregado a Favoritos y lo voy a seguir.

Gracias por crear esta maravillosa historia. Me despido, besos.

I'm not sure whether to laugh or cry at the fact that you censor the word fuck xD