Awesome. Great job.

Small series is a good idea! :)

I liked that. It would be nice to see a series. I'm okay with a lisp, but the grammar is a tat irritating. Which season is the story set in? In the current one Henry would be around five years old and language skills like this would be seriously concerning and be a long-ignored call for speech therapy (I'm sorry if it's an odd point to pay that much attention to, I like linguistics).
But everything else read nicely, was quite angsty but not unnaying as is somethines the case with a hurt/comfort fic and if there's going to be more I'm looking forward to reading it!

This was really powerful!

Just one little thing, Henry wouldn't say 'Mummy' he would say 'Mommy'. Because of their accents, that's how it's written if you're writing for American characters. Other than that, brilliant story, and I really look forward to reading the rest of the series :D

Luv this

You should write more. Great story.

Awww this was good

You should make it into a series!

Ow, love this. Definitely want to read more.

It would be interesting to see where you take this. You should definitely do a multi-chapter story with this. Good first chapter!