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sorry but I'm going to be really blunt. This story could've ended amazingly but you just had to go kill off hazel. I honestly don't know why you felt the need to include that. She was already tortured, don't you think she suffered enough? also If the prophecy said that one would die, and that was Henry so why would hazel die.

I was really enjoying this story, the idea of having a world with talking animals is unique and you handled it very well.. Until you had to include some sort of character death because happy endings just can't exist.

Even though everything else was fine, a bad ending will always tank a story. 78

What kind of Hunger Games copyright scene. . .

What the hell dude don't end it like that~! T.T

I love how you incorporated the Underland Chronicles into the story! It definately makes the story unique and original. Keep writing, this story has me hooked!

This has the makings for a sequel?

WHYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYYY!? WHY WOULD YOU DO THIS.

Live!

But do keep writing! Everyone has to start somewhere! :)

The story was going good, overpowered main character is understandable because most authors like to picture themselves as the protagonist. However, how you painted the guys wasn't that good, they were 14 year old girls, Percy doesn't stutter about a girl when he has a girlfriend, Jason was a preator he doesn't stutter. At all. But I had ignored all that because I like reading Percy with OCs. But as soon as your have her brass knuckles the morphed in to guns. (I think) I immediately stopped reading. Was going good but a bit too unrealistic even in a fantasy world :/ -Aegis

Great chapter as always! x

You are evil.

I just want to tell u that demigods can still control over their parent domain even thou place where gods doesn't have power over (I just remember this from Son of Neptne)
Ex; Alaska -Percy state that he felt that he could feel power over sea around Alaska (he felt strong that he he compare himself as god/Poseidon or being god)

So maybe u could make demigods realize that they still have power, but some evil force is blocking demigod's power

I am curious as to why you have Percy's power turned down so so much. If the river water wOn't listen, well Percy can control blood. Percy's not weak, and yet you made him so. Besides that good story.

Your story deserves a lot more reviews! It's utterly amazing. At first I thought, 'wow, Hick is such a weird name' but it totally fits her. I would love for her and Percy to get together, haha. Keep writing! :)

Great chapter, but the bad news;I have to reread other chapters (I forgot the last of the story except ch. 11)