your username is amazing. just wanted to let you know.

Ok... Why do I get the feeling that lokis basically possessing hazel?

Please take your time updating.

I for one couldn't follow the plot,and two the story is all over the place . it seems to me like you have no idea how you want the story to go. it started out as a really good story than it turned down right confusing. i have a few questions . 1)what happened to hazel that made her change so drastically? 2)is hazel suffering from amnesia and if so how did she get it? 3) what happened with the loki scene after she fainted ? and 4)why did hermione act like she had never left the mdical wing in the first place? these questions are ones thwt would really help me figure out what is going on in the plot

nooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo. Its over. How could you. Can u give us a link to the rewrite

That is NOT how a 6-year-old speaks...

"Maybe kill third." - umm... Tony taught two prepubescent girls to kill?

"She hadn't seen something this strong since…" - she has learned to judge the strength of magic at some point? Has a lot of experience with it, does she? When did that happen?

"she blurted out the spell" - again, how old are they? How do they know spells?

"that drenched up her magical core quite a bit" - it made her core wet? Because that's what "drench" means - it means to make something wet.

So... Another time skip? How many years has it been? What happened during that time?

"Hazel always manages" - you switched to present tense all of a sudden. Try not to do that.

? How did Hermione meet Fury? There apparently was a timeskip where a bunch of stuff happened - except that we don't know what happened and have to guess.

...Sounds like a wild party. Why weren't any of my childhood birthday parties that awesome?

(nods) I totally understand. One of the difficulties of publishing serially like this is losing track of your threads or just plain lack of time. I rather liken writing here to writers' workshops we're all working to improve our skills so hopefully we look back at our older works and see how much we've grown. Good luck with school and your rewrite. :D

I have just finished the 14 chapters you have put up, but, I zam not sure where you are going with it over the last coupke of chapters. The feel of the story has changed and become darker and uncertain.

I thoroughly enjoyed the first 12 chapters

Well, I understand the difficulties of trying to write your own story and losing mentum midway. However, I would really like it if you could edit this to add a bit more context, a bit more explanation between chapters. I was enomously confused at the burning bed and young hermione chapters until I read that they were sort of just, extra tidbits midway. Except I read that after reading both of them in your AN, so I was trying to string along a story with no rhyme or reason. Please add clarity.

From the beginning I kept thinking of Hazel as about 16 years old, because that's how old she acted. You can imagine my surprise when you mentioned her as being only six-ish! I am aware that my guessed age wouldn't have fit hogwarts-wise…but that is the age I imagined her.

Previously, it was like "yeah, Hermione is her friend. No big deal." There wasn't a huge amount of significance of this fact. Now it's like..."Hermione is the tag along friend of a cold amnesiac."
About the 'new Hazel' plot line. I would suggest leaving hints as you go that explain the amnesia. As of right now, I haven't a clue other than my guess that she switched with some alternate dimension Hazel or Loki and the staff did something. Both? I'm grasping at straws here.

Tomy and the original idea are all but gone. What about dumbledore? Would he know that Hazel left? Wasn't mrs figg watching Harry?

If you don't think you would continue this fic, I would accept an 'epilogue' that explains your events. Because really, I would love an explanation.

It's a good story, but I am confused is she now loki

ohhhhhh interesting

i like hows this story is playing out but im very confused on what happend to Hazel.

are you planning on clarifying on it in the next chapter or two?
I got two idea but honestly the double perspective change is throwing me off.

any who i look forward to the next chapter or two - Dad!Tony at Hogwarts is always a fun thing to read on.

good job so far.