It is a good story keep it up.

uh have you even read the expanded universe? the story isn't bad the EU references are just sad

Hmmm, those pirates need to be wiped out quickly. I hope Padme and the queen get out of this okay.

Well, it seems that as far as action goes, Padme hasn't changed much. I wonder how things will go from here.

You have a few run on sentences in your work other than that great job(see what I did?)

So there is a mole in the New Republic government. That makes allot of sense about how the pirates were able to get there. Hopefully, help is on way anyway.

Could use some editing and rewriting in some spots. To smooth things out and keep things feeling less jumbled and rushed.

Hmmm, I hope Padme can find some way to escape and Luke needs to just keep control. Padme and Leia can look after themselves.

Well, everyone is in a bad situation. I hope it can all be resolved and I hope Padme gets away from those pirates.

I wonder what it is that is approaching Padme. Hopefully, she'll be alright and Leia finds her in time.

Hmm I hope ghe Queen's and Padme's ship manages to get to the station in one piece.

Hmmm, Padme and the queen are in a bit of a fix, but at least they are on a ship. Luke and the other Jedi now have a situation to deal with, it seems.

Padme can still handle herself if she really has to. I hope they can overcome Thrawn as well.

I'm just starting the story, and it has an interesting plot and the characterization is quite accurate. My only problem is the repeated use of very. It could benefit from different adjectives, like wicked sharp claws instead 9f very sharp claws. Other than that and a bit of awkward grammar the story is great.

I hope they can get away safely. To lose Padme now would be a disaster.