Reviews is based on Chapter and not the Story as a Whole will saved that for the last chapter.

Chp 1 review: Nice use of descriptive narrative, but it's kinda hurt some spot. BasicallyShow, dont Tell." Otherwise it is not a bad chapter to start off the story.

I read your story from 2 years ago but it hasn't updated for a long time. I waiting for your story.

What the fuck I need bleach

lot of deleted scenes huh

What's will happen if Minx found out about her son & knew his location ?

Cccc

Monika?

Your edits are obvious. The edits always appear in places with bad grammar.

This chapter has grammar more terrible than the original. If you need someone to look over your work, I'll do it.

This has to be the saddest pokemon fanfic I have ever read. And when Minx got shot... I had major tears. I cried more then the time I watched Marly and Me by myself. Why did Minx have to die?

This theme and plot is extremely interesting, but I advise you better your grammar skills and looking over the chapter before submitting it.

I really enjoy this story and it's sad to see it hasn't been updated in awhile. I hope everything is going well. Great job as well. Even with the bad grammar but I won't hate on it for that.

legal adorei eu amei sua historia sou br brasil e uma pena mesmo o google tradutor traduzir de forma erronea

Hi, I'm Daniel from Spain. I must say that I love this fan comic, but during this 2 chapters I was confused , did minx died? I hope she didn't, maybe I did miss something? Is this comic going to keep developing?

See ha :D

I can see where this story is going and the blue flames are going to be a recurring thing in the story like bad wolf from doctor who