So saaaaaad! But that's a good thing!

Wonderful story. I like to imagine that something like this did happen after Susan stopped believing in Aslan and Narnia. I loved the way you depicted Edmund. I am going to add this to my community The Breath of Aslan.

This is a good story. I liked how Edmund tried to convince Susan that Aslan is merciful, but unfortunately she is stubborn.

I thought this was very well done. Lovely.

Thank you. :)

Nicely done and it would be Edmund who told her what she needed to hear. Peter would have shouted & Lucy would be upset. But Edmund no matter what it cost him preserved and planted words necessary for Susan to hear. She will probably bitterly regret not listening after they died in LB. Mind you I always felt she did return to Narnia it must that Aslan gave her the time to remember.

This was very well-written and had a great pace that made me want to keep reading. Edmund was a great choice for being the one to talk to Susan, since 1) He knows about Aslan's Grace most intimately, and 2) He's has the most patience to deal with Susan's stubbornness. He and Su were both really in character and reflect how C. S. Lewis would've wanted his characters to be.

This is lovely! :) Well done!