I loved this Fanfiction please make more

This has potential but this second chapter was harder to follow, you seemed to be changing POV almost every paragraph. You also mentioned 3 months and 3 weeks, you need to stay consistent. Hope that is helpful and not flamey, you sort those bits out and this could go a long way! :)

Awesome, and charming. Definitely going to continue reading this story!

it is good, plz leave a note when swift perspective or POV.

"I frowned as I saw my house guest start to gag and heave, wondering what was wrong before it hit me like a ton of bricks. 'Idiot" I think this "I" is thor, right?
"I stared at the human who was so willingly offering himself to me. " This "I" is loki, right?

I think it work better if it is 3rd person. well, that just suggestive. *shrud*

sexy, sweet inconent vamp loki