I’m intrigued! I’m enjoying the story so far. I can’t wait to find out more about what’s happening!

I also like the bit of backstory with Ludwig and his bitterness towards Bowser. And Bowser’s dance with Peach made me happy since I’m a Powser shipper! XD

Nice to see Gonzalez Jr show up. He's pretty under appreciated compared to the other partners. I'm curious as to what Morton will bring to the tournament as well.

Glitzville is in Nimbus Land? That's an interesting idea since they're both in the clouds. Also, nice to see Mallow as King.

Nice to see this is being updated again. Sure hope we find out some info on the Master and his plans soon!

Lovely story

Ooohh! I like it, I love it, the intensity is over the top! Nice! I hope you continue with this.

...Wow. That went from 0 to 100 very quickly. I had originally thought of mentioning that adding in characters just to kill them is sort of a dumb thing to do in my previous review, but I wasn't expecting you to actually kill them. While I could see this working in a regular novel, a fanfiction utilizing canon characters that might be fan favorites could leave some people upset. It also stings even more because you basically replaced a canon character with an OC that fills an almost identical role. Of course, that doesn't make character death in fanfiction inherently bad: if it was using forgettable NPCs or unlikable bosses, such as Chet Rippo or Tubba Blubba, this scene would've been an appealing way to make the fight more personal without leaving people annoyed.

As for the main part of the chapter, I think it's fine. I like how Yoshi's team doesn't consist of only heroes, but also a former member of the Koopa Troop. I'm glad you've started a trend of put both the protagonist and the villain in the spotlight for each chapter. Hopefully the story continues to develop and evolve after busting Jonathan Jones out of prison.

I have to say, what I've read of this so far is appealing. I like the concept of the story. Still, I have several issues with some certain parts of this set of chapters. To avoid looking like spam, I'll just include all of my points here. Watch out- this is a long one.

Issue #1:
The sense of mystery introduced early on was thrown out very quickly. Why? Because you only gave us three kingdoms that are central to the story up to the point where Yoshi is introduced, and two of those three are being attacked. If you had introduced more fanmade kingdoms, then there would be a continued mystery because the amount of suspects are increased.

Issue #2:
There are FAR too many perspective changes. Ever heard of the term, 'show, don't tell?' That would be very beneficial here. Rather than telling us everything about Mario, Luigi, and Peach's disappearances, SHOW us the consequences of them being missing... which, ironically, you did. But, if we were going to be told that they went missing anyway, what was the point of reading the first few chapters...?
This also rolls over to after Yoshi gets introduced, when we see Parakarry, Kooper, and Goombario fight. A much better way to handle this would be to have Yoshi watch Parakarry and Kooper get beaten into submission. This would make Yoshi realize that he might be the only person currently capable of stopping the threat, and also cut down on how much writing you have to do.
A big problem with perspective changes is because, the longer we're away from the protagonist, the less attached we are to them. I know that was the case for me. After four rapid fire chapters not really advancing the story, I had lost some interest in continuing reading because I hadn't established a connection to Yoshi like I had done to all of the previous character that were the focus of a chapter.

Issue #3:
Yoshi is too lonely! That's not to say a lonely journey is bad. Reading about someone overcoming the elements can be a good premise. However, if he's just going to fly over it with minimal threat, then there needs to be something going on up there. In my opinion, Boshi, Parakarry, or Paraklutz should've accompanied Yoshi, so Yoshi would have a character dynamic to set up while flying.

Issue #4:
The Goombario and Star Haven chapters are unessesary. Because of what happened to Parakarry and Kooper, the reader already knows what will happen to Goombario, making the chapter possible to skip: something you do not want to be possible. Personally, I would have Kooper and Goombario fight as a team. This would give the reader a false sense of hope that the two of them could outdo Parakarry, while also lowering the amount of writing needed.
As for Star Haven, we don't need a chapter telling us that it went up in flames because we already have one: Parakarry's chapter! Knowing that the center of what is essentially the religion of the Mario universe is all we need to know to understand that the stakes are high. Elaborating on it the way you did just keeps us away from our protagonist for longer, which I already stated is a bad thing.

I think all of this is just a result of one big problem: you write too much! Yes, I know that's a weird thing to say, but trying to elaborate too much on everything just makes the story sluggish and a bit boring to read. That's really not something I want to say, because this reminds me so much of my own fanfic it hurts. You just need to find the right balance of character interaction, action, and plot progression, and I feel like this story could be so much better than what it is at this point in time. Who knows? Maybe you iron out some of these issues later on and I just need to keep reading...

Hey! I might've lied... I actually neglected my summer reading and read this from start to finish last night! And since I woke up around and hour ago...
Anyway, just reading it again made me realize just how invested I was in this story. I mean, I really really want Johnny to be rescued (I think he will be.), and how much I want the heroes to succeed in their quest. All of your characters have unique characterizations, all of which capitalize on canon (and some fanon), but retain your own personal flair, which I think is awesome. Like, I'm not really a big fan of the Koopalings, but you make me really curious about them and their relationships to one another. Overall, it's a great story, and when (Or if? Hopefully when.) you continue, I will continue to be there with you every step of the way!

I assume by new format you mean reintroducing the characters at the beginning of every chapter. If so, I think it's an interesting style, but I've wondered more than a few times if I've gone to the wrong chapter :P

Interesting you bring up Roy...I have to profess that I find his dialogue a little bit uncomfortable, but if you haven't got any complaints about it I guess I wouldn't worry.

As for giving the fic a makeover, I suppose I wouldn't bother. I've thought about doing that sort of thing myself, but then I wondered if anyone would actually bother to read the whole thing again anyway (unlikely) and if it'd just be better to put my increased skills on new stories (more likely).

Anyway, great work, I wish you continual luck in 2015!

Good to see you update!

Dialogue and characters are fun as usual. Your writing has improved wonderfully since you started the story; have you been practicing elsewhere?

Welcome back, Eduardo! Glad that you could join us again.

I just read through everything I've missed! Sorry about not doing it sooner, but school got really annoying, then finals started, then my internet loaded really badly for a month on my tablet and other devices, and not at all on my computer.
Anyway! It was still awesome! I love the direction the story is going in! I can't wait to see what'll happen next chapter, especially with Yoshi, Daisy, and Morton's antics!

Paper Mario terminology and partners, yay! There are so many characters, it's hard to keep up with who is doing what!

The writing was very descriptive and it was fun getting all of the references to the Paper Mario locations. It looks like the koopalings are making allies with the two "leaders" of Rogueport all for their mysterious master. I'm still going to guess it's Smithy. Interesting flashback that really shows how good of a person Ludwig was before he was brainwashed. Perhaps this flashback is a sign that his old self is trying to break free of his currently cold and artificial shell...

Great chapter! I look forward to the next!