Childhood friends! I've always been a sucker for these things haha. It's a really cute one-shot Though I was kind of mad at Milly for not telling C.C. about Lelouch dating Kallen; it'd certainly save our favorite witch the embarrassment, but hey at least they ended up together LOL!

I liked everything about this, except the 'witch, warlock' thing. I don't know, it's kind of a bit random lol. Anyway, good job on this!

Aw xD from friend - best friend - crush aand bam... Maybe you can make a story with this (i mean longer)

OH MY GOSH! You know Princess Hours?! I love that show even if it was a long time ago. I love your story by the way. I actually love all your stories so please upload more!

Although it's pretty long, it still feels lacking to me. No matter if it's a one-shot but please write as if there are no limitations. Imaginations must be free. It looks like it's rushed, yeah and the storyline is a typical 'bestfriends-fall-with-each-other'. However, to cross the line of being typical, the characters must be well-developed. They were written awkwardly for me. I have to point out these things.

1) What happened during the time they hadn't seen each other since their meeting at the park? Did C.C.'s family moved? Or was it Lelouch's? Seeing that they attended the same middle school, it looks like they're living in the same neighbourhood...
2) The witch-warlock thing is vague. How did they end up calling each other wih these nicknames? Plus, the word that represents possessionㅡMY. I mean, I get it that they're bestfriends but calling each other 'my' is kinda romantic. Idk but well, since they're oblivious on their feelings and such.
3) Why the hell did Kallen suddenly acted like that? If she didn't cheat and did something of that sort...

tl;dr Your plot is good despite the lack of details. I'd suggest you to proofread your work if you don't want to have a beta-reader. I believe you can improve because you have a great potential. Don't stop writing! :)

Sorry for the long review.

PS: The first part was funny. I laughed when Lelouch told his mother that he looks like a girl!

I feel like I just read a tl;dr of Twilight...

Imo, flesh this out more because it feels like you wrote it for yourself rather than audience. The transitions are very awkward with no explanations of the character's reasoning or motivations. How do they even fall in love? You don't even explain their personalities until AFTER they're married.

Very amateur but shows great potential. Just remember everything you write is for someone else even diaries. Thats why we write "Dear Diary."

There are some grammatical and typographical errors,but overall,Its pretty you should get a beta reader or try reading your story two or three times more before submitting it to make sure that everything's alright.

Very fun and sweet fanfic ! :D

Quite rushing, good attempt

What I liked - The setting with step by step description of events transpiring through their life. The minor interactions between Lelouch and CC. And how Lelouch was the one who connected CC to the rest of the gang.

What I liked less - Even though it might have been an AU setting, CC came across a little like Shirley. Rather than others telling her what's going on with Lelouch she would've been perceptive enough to notice what's happening between him and Kallen. Maybe because I'm such a huge fan of CC, but I didn't like it when Lelouch rejeced her. Left a bad taste even though they came together in the end.

Really rushed... but done reasonably well considering you covered 16 years of their lives. What I really want to know is why and when they started calling each other "witch" and "warlock." I mean, I know they call each other that in the series, but you didn't give an explanation of why they did in THIS story, which is in an alternate universe.
hehehe... I love C.C.'s first reaction to Lelouch. Is it a boy or a girl? Don't worry, C.C.
I have a hard time answering that myself, even if I see him when he's a 16-year-old xD

Not really what I'm expecting for the second day of a new Lunar Year, but thanks, you entertain me. Nice job!