I read that last part I cheered at the same time I'd love to see oh I don't know say a side story of say years later a team goes there and finds an old cranky Pete who over the years managed to build a life. For himself and basically came to the realization through all that time he was a moron

And I guess even then because of the Timeless Child episode for the Modern Doctor Who Season 12 there has developed even more gaps than before but that is all part of Doctor Who's mystery of rediscovery and reexploration.

And I guess even then because of the Timeless Child episode for the Modern Doctor Who Season 12 there has developed even more gaps than before but that is all part of Doctor Who's mystery of rediscovery and reexploration.

If you read/check out Whoniverse "An Unofficial Planet by Planet Guide to the Universe of the Doctor, From Gallifrey to Skaro. You would see that your story's history time line is in truth actually not as complete as you had claimed in one of your messages to me.

i took 4 days to binge this during quarantine. loved it. keep on writing!

So my only gripe with this chapter is the way Willow explains that she can't go back to Sunnydale. As a commissioned officer in the USAF she would be under contract (an oath) to perform work at a duty station for a minimum of set amount of years. I know that I would have told dawn sorry but a contract was signed and will be charged by military justice if Willow just ups and disappears.

Other than that I am having fun with this so far! Now back to the story!

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You could include these technologies and weapons and the Willow and Dawn could consider evolving from near ascended Ancients/Alterans to Ancient/Alteran Galliferiyan/Time Lord Hybrids. That is actually theoretically possible since there are and were apparently home sapien/human beings and galliferiyan/time lord hybrids already done before.

I am really enjoying this story and I realize that you probably already have it finished or close to having it finished however there is quite a few things that I you would enjoy directly adding as a chapter by chapter story edit update or even as a spin-off story series.

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I am really enjoying this story and I realize that you probably already have it finished or close to having it finished however there is quite a few things that I you would enjoy directly adding as a chapter by chapter story edit update or even as a spin-off story series.

wiki/Buffy_the_Vampire_Slayer_(franchise)

wiki/Omniverse

wiki/Omniverse

wiki/Multiverse

wiki/Multiverse/Universe_Listing

wiki/List_of_DC_Multiverse_worlds

wiki/Multiverse_(DC_Comics)

wiki/List_of_DC_Multiverse_worlds

wiki/Category:Multiverse

wiki/Werewolf

wiki/Category:Marvel_Comics_vampires

wiki/Inheritors_(comics)

wiki/Vampire_(Marvel_Comics)

wiki/Vampire

wiki/Last_Great_Time_War

wiki/Multiverse

wiki/Multiverse

wiki/Multiverse

wiki/The_Doctor_(Earth-5556)

wiki/Multiverse

wiki/Intercompany_Crossovers

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profile/rubicon/lists/marvel-intercompany-crossovers/56517/

wiki/Thread:1002804?useskinoasis

wiki/Vampires

wiki/Vampire

wiki/Werewolf

wiki/Category:Marvel_Comics_vampires

wiki/Inheritors_(comics)

wiki/Vampires

Now Buffy the Vampire slayer can definitely have vampire hunting/slaying fun and your fanfiction version of the updated quantum mears can be said to have the ability to reach universes/realities/timelines that the regular quantum mears wouldn't be able to reach. And oh yeah there is also these to include into this story series:

Stargate-Origins-Catherine-Ellie-Gall/dp/B07NSVJTD7

wiki/List_of_Stargate_literature

wiki/Stargate_literature

books/

slp/stargate-books/rpy4bq8n3ofn372

hubs/v/the-avengers

wiki/Hypertime

wiki/Secret_Wars

wiki/Secret_Wars_(2015_comic_book)

comics/events/270/secret_wars

wiki/Crisis_on_Infinite_Earths

wiki/Time_war

wiki/Last_Great_Time_War

hubs/v/doctor-who

hubs/v/doctor-whothe-new-series

hubs/v/the-worlds-of-doctor-who

hubs/v/charlotte-pollard

hubs/v/bernice-summerfield

wiki/Last_Great_Time_War

wiki/Multiverse

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[report review for abuse] ConlonKeith chapter 84 . Dec 7
I am really enjoying this story and I realize that you probably already have it finished or close to having it finished however there is quite a few things that I you would enjoy directly adding as a chapter by chapter story edit update or even as a spin-off story series.

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wiki/Omniverse

wiki/Omniverse

wiki/Multiverse

wiki/Multiverse/Universe_Listing

wiki/List_of_DC_Multiverse_worlds

wiki/Multiverse_(DC_Comics)

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wiki/Category:Multiverse

wiki/Werewolf

wiki/Category:Marvel_Comics_vampires

wiki/Inheritors_(comics)

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wiki/Last_Great_Time_War

wiki/Multiverse

wiki/Multiverse

wiki/Multiverse

wiki/The_Doctor_(Earth-5556)

wiki/Multiverse

wiki/Intercompany_Crossovers

wiki/Intercompany_crossover

profile/rubicon/lists/marvel-intercompany-crossovers/56517/

wiki/Thread:1002804?useskinoasis

wiki/Vampires

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wiki/Werewolf

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Now Buffy the Vampire slayer can

Good update. Illyria was an interesting person in the show.

This has been an excellent story and given the plot lines that are still quite a way from being resolved and the tons of possibilities that could be introduced, I would not be surprised if this were to pass three million words!

One thing, Isn't Major Rosenberg due for a promotion to Lt. Colonel?

Awesome work, keep going!

1 Willow and Faith did this permanent, always on telepathic bond a few chapters back... Willow making it very clear that the two would NOT be able to keep ANY secrets from each other.

2 That in and of itself was cool, however in this chapter you have Faith acting like she's keeping her planned proposal a secret until "sometime special"

Therefore if item 1 is true, item 2 is NOT POSSIBLE

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"Jack" said Daniel, "you've been seeing parts of the life of a barber in Indiana for seven years, and you never mentioned it?"
...
"I concur" said Willow.
You don't remember you own story do you? Willow knew. Either via mind reading or told. I think it was during the ancient repo storyline.

"I don't need the full Slayer abilities to beat a coward and a traitor like you" said Kennedy
Will you please knock it the * # off with the betrayal/traitor bullshit?
Either explain what it is they think was the betrayal and who's telling everyone to say that or stop it.
Absolutely realistic if even a single person started propaganda at some point and got everyone to agree, and forevermore Willow would be the enemy. Sure. So where's that initial thing? Give us the damn view. If it doesn't matter then cut these idiots out of the story. If it does matter than $ #*& $#(*&ing show it to us!

If it's "you put them in jail".. clearly she didn't. She warned them that someone else WOULD put them in jail. And then she worked her hardest (and they know it) to keep them out of jail.
Yes anger defies logic, but you still never even showed us the anger or someone even saying WHAT they think was the betrayal. If it's the "jail" thing, that's way too late. They were already acting that way when they just kidnapped her.
And they didn't kidnap the president, so they obviously know that they hated Willow in particular before it.

"Why can't I sense anyone? Where are everyone's thoughts? Colonel? Teal'c? Faith? Where are you Faith? Why can't I see you? Why can't I hear you?" thought Willow to herself as she looked at her own hands that were covered in her own blood.
Yeah, massive plothole.
The counters that Carter implemented were for her magic, not for her ancient abilities (or vice versa) that's why Anubis was able to get out anyway.
Replicarter clearly used the same thing.
Even if we ignore that massive plothole, willow is smarter than that.
She'd have noticed she can't read ANYONE after she couldn't read replicater.
And then realized that someone turned off her abilities, obviously replicater, and then either confronted her immediately or tried to kill her right away. Not this freaking late.
Similarly as soon as they started doubting replicarter (read immediately) they would ask Thor to TEST out the gun/sattelite on a replicator and verify it has stopped working.

I'm done reviewing, not going to leave any more reviews unless you actually do something good again.

"We really don't like traitors" said Kennedy, "You betrayed your friends…"
You know.. you still haven't ever had a single person say what Willow did that they believe was a betrayal. Everytime you get back to this it just gets more annoying.

Alternate Willow? You are drawing explicitly on canon irrationality and hurt (and immediately after the hurt) so this makes sense. You also _showed_ a little of the irrationality and hurt.

There are plenty of times where in canon people in BtVS wonder what the right thing to do is. That never happened during the entire thing with Willow vs scoobies/etc. The only thing we were ever showed was .. come on this is Willow.. so no one ever considered that it might not be the right thing to do (or consider alternatives) but the only mitigating factor was residual feelings.

"I was right" she said to herself, "They thought I'd go after Warren's friends, by the time they realize where I am, they'll be too late. I'm now fully charged after taking everything that Rack had, wish someone had been there to watch my handiwork. It was a vast improvement when compared to how he usually is"

You're getting really lazy with the telling instead of showing. You're even having your characters thoughts do the telling.
You don't have to show us everything, but you should show us enough that we know _why_ people do what they do. (Eventually). Right now.. everyone hates Willow. And thinks they betrayed them. *given that* the rest makes sense. But I still have no freaking idea why it happened in the first place.

Dr. Lee recalled that General O'Neill had ordered this mirror destroyed but no matter what they did, it couldn't be damaged.
Yes. Couldn't be destroyed. And since they've dealt with event horizons for every single day for the last number of years, they simply put an iris on it and covered it up in a way that there's no room for anyone to come out of it. Oh wait.. no.. you gave them a 20 pound idiot ball to hold.
The "convinced to let them study it" part works fine. The heavy guard in case someone comes out? Sure.. WHEN they're studying it. When they're not studying it it should have an iris or be in a box. If you simply said they were currently studying it (e.g. removed from box) when Willow came through? That would work. But as it is, the more you said the less sense it makes.

Most of this stuff lately feels like I have no clue what people are thinking or why.
You completely left out why Alt. Willow thinks SG1-Willow even created the situation.
All we know is that she saved Dawn, and then ... well basically nothing.
Since that doesn't makes sense to me, as I read things.. it loses all its context and value.
It basically becomes nothing more than "person angry, irrational, fight".. And no value past that. Because not only do I now know why she's angry (yes she is blaming Willow, but I have no idea WHY she is blaming Willow. Is it purely irrational and just picked someone to blame, or is there even a tiny tenuous relationship?) but you don't actually SHOW us that she's angry.

Unfortunately you're no longer consistent. you switch between a good amount of showing, letting us understand the emotions or reasonings behind what's going on.. to skipping tons of stuff (but telling us very minimal details about it anyway), not explaining anything and it feels like random scenes.
It feels like there's more than one author and one of them isn't any good.
The constant whiplash periodically makes me not care at all what happens to these characters.