"Sayaka's text said to be at her house at 8:00. Her phone's clock read 57:47"
I think the 5 is not supposed to be there.
Otherwise I liked the story.

Not a fan of KyoSaya, but I definetly enjoyed the KyoHomu bits. Good job.

Now this is a hell of a lotta fun!
To be honest I can't decide if I like the KyoHomu or KyoSaya moments more! I guess Kyoko is like the perfect mixer - she goes with anything!

lol Homura's stupid voicemails. I love this story

This was awesome. Just awesome
I have nothing else to say cause I'm not bothered for a long review

I deMand a continuation
This was really well written , great job

LOL! I think you nailed it with Sayaka's first drink. It's also quite fun trying to imagine Kyoko being the grown up one, and a little difficult if I must be honest. Keep up the good work, Sparx out.