Hijacking a funeral to proclaim that you and the deceased were best friends and then singing a song, was one of the oddest things I've ever read in fanfiction. Was that suppose to be cool or sad. I just cringed cause it was so out of line and crazy. Tommy never mentioned their friendship to anyone all those years? Weird plot twist there.

You quoted the lion king when Rafiki hit Simba on the head with his stick

Wow

Constructive criticism: Mind your punctuation. There are a lot of commas and periods missing. Also, when a character is yelling, don't capitalize all the words, it makes the writing look immature, just use exclamation points, it gets the message across the same way. Focus on scenery and thought processes as well as dialogue, you're lacking in descriptive detail. Keep writing though, practice makes perfect.

Wonderful work

I am sorry... I really tried... I read first 3 chapters but there is so many spelliing mistakes that I can't take it any more! English is not my first language and maybe I am not perfect (I also speak italian and spanish and my native croatian - not a humble brag) but I can't understand how can you confuse your and you are! Sorry, maybe next time, when I run out of arrow ff! :(

loved this story :) Thank you :)

Update Soon
Happy Ending Please (lol)
OLICITY FOREVER

Please could you re submit this chapter it went all weird. Thanks

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Please don't make it end like this. I'm already crying. Lol PLEASE update soon

Omg is that it over now?

Oh no I hope shes not dead its slade playing mind games. Stupid Oliver pushing everyone away. I cant wait to find out whats going on

Continue please love reading this

I love it! The wedding was really cute :), but then this last chapter was really heartbreaking :'(. But it was still great! I hope you update soon again :)