that is amazing! I love wizard so much!

Cute epilogue, I thought it was a nice end to this story! Though it’s somewhat strange thinking of someone as shy and reclusive as Wizard giving a performance like that to the entire town, but I suppose he’s changed by now, hasn’t he? Not as drastically as the Witch, of course, but he’s become closer to humans thanks to Molly and Luke and everyone else.

Great job on this story, I loved reading it! I’ll have to check out your other works sometime, haha.

-CCM

The explanation of the Witch being driven mad slowly by her own isolation makes sense, and I can see why she may have chosen to hold Luke and the Wizard captive as some weird and crazy jealousy thing, though that’s definitely not an excuse for her actions. I still can’t quite feel bad for her. And there was no way it could have worked, anyway, especially once Molly found out the truth. But the Witch wasn’t quite in her right mind, and I do think it’s good that she was given a second chance. Being immortal can be hard.

And I think this chapter is just as well written as any of the others! It’s a little difficult to point out the few errors I did find without the ability to copy/paste, but I’ll try, since you asked us to point out anything if we caught it. I’ll just put brackets around any of the missed or misspelled words and other typos I noticed. I hope you don’t mind my doing so!

During Wizard’s explanation, he says “[It is a reason me captive], as well as Luke after he entered a relationship with Molly. Witch Princess’ craving for attention had blinded her to the inevitable repercussion when Molly learned of the witch’s crimes and [choose] Luke over her.” – first part is missing a few words, “choose” should be past tense.

And later on, the Harvest Goddess says “And what of her magic? I cannot unleash one with and no knowledge of how to control it.” – just a random period in the middle of the line. But these are the only things that stood out to me while reading through.

Anyway, I also found it especially nice how Luke didn’t want revenge on the Witch for what had happened to him. It just seemed so… mature, coming from him. I get the sense that a lot of the characters experienced some personal growth over this whole little ordeal, which is good.

Is the Witch now… Sharron? From RF1? The description fits…

-CCM

This was so cute! I really enjoyed the magical fight. Good job describing everything going on! Luke and Molly are so adorable. I look forward to seeing the epilogue. Keep writing! :)

This was a great ending! I have to say, I think you're much better at writing battle/fight scenes than I am, haha. I always seem to struugle with those. And I always love reading your witty banter between characters! I never expected the Witch to be that crazy; it was very surprising, to say the least. And I love the idea of Molly being a, well, you know!

Bo and Wizard were probably my favorite characters in this, though Molly and Luke were as cute a couple as ever, of course. It makes me want to go back and read your other story about them, The Thousand Lumber Bet (Yes, I still remember it. What can I say, it's one of my favorite Harvest Moon fanfictions)!

Nice job on this story! Can't wait to read the epilogue!

-CCM

Oh goodness, Luke is so incredibly random. But somehow, it's like a breath of fresh air reading his strange, funny little thoughts and commentary, even if it can get annoying at times. He's like a hyperactive kindergartener trapped in an attractive young man's body sometimes, I swear.

But Wizard also has his fair share of funniness - "I am a wizard... and not Snow White."

The explanation of the Wizard's eyes was also fascinating, did you think of that yourself? Very interesting, including the bit about the Witch... And I liked the mention of Earthmates, like in Rune Factory!

-CCM

Ugh, I'm so behind on all the good stories here. And my own, now that I think of it.

Ha, your use of Beast Boy and Raven as a reference for the interactions between Luke and Wizard is a hilarious thought; I used to love Teen Titans. And the bickering between Bo, Chloe, and Owen there at the beginning... also hilarious. I love the way you write dialogue, natural-sounding and funny where it's meant to be. "Carrot juice is natural."

"You spend every cent you have on weights and cocktails." "Not true! Yesterday I bought a Snickers bar."

And Molly's "You don't deserve pie. There's a field. Go there and eat grass or something." I really didn't expect her to do what she just did! She even lied about the pie! I am shocked. And what is her Plan B?

But really, there is no end to the hilarity in this story, and it's somewhat strange but still works well when combined with the more serious themes, like kidnapping and all that. And Bo is so sweet and understanding and in deep contrast with Luke and the others, I thought you did a great job of writing his point of view. I especially liked his thoughts regarding Irene, the lollipops and goldfish bandaids. He's so cute, I love him in this. I honestly don't have any criticisms regarding it!

-CCM

Wow just wow! So much action and description I absolutely loved it! It had the perfect amount of suspense, action, mystery, and the speck of romance flowed so easily it wasn't forced at all.

The only problem that irked me was how the With Princess became so demented in a blink of an eye. Don't get me wrong, it was very good. She fit the witch part of her to a T, down to the fireballs haha.

All in all, it was a very exciting chapter. I'm sad that the story is ending but I'm looking forward to how you will end it. Time to patiently wait for the epilogue :)

Yayy another chapter :) Chloe is such a go getter I love it! She's very stubborn too. This chapter was pure fun and silly but added to the story in a nice way. I'm not dissapointed, and glad to see another part of the story was added. Can't wait for next time :)

Awww nice little bonding time they had there :) I'm actually surprised the Wizard hasn't gone insane with Luke's nonsense.

I really like the whole "The Earth was born" story you turned into your own. Even if it is just a small filler chapter, it's nice to come back to the story and read. Can't wait for the other parts :)

As for the riddle... I'm at a loss /.\ you've stumped me lol

Loved the update :) Very excited to see where this is going! I really like how you wrote Bo. Keep writing !

Nice to hear from you again stranger! But seriously, I liked the transition in narration. It's nice to see inside Bo's head, especially since we never get to really "get to know" him as well in the game. I think you did a pretty good job with his pov.

The tiny Molly and Luke moment gave me butterflies. I can just imagine how Molly felt being in Luke's arms. The star thing kind of confused me though, was it like a premonition ? Agh! These thIngs just keep me hooked to read more! I can't wait till the next part :)

My guesses for the riddle arrreee sunrise or sunset!

I’m so glad to see that you’ve updated!

I have to say, I absolutely love all your eye descriptions in this story, haha. From the Witch’s orange eyes to Molly’s amber ones; and Luke’s honey-golden feline eyes compared to the Wizard’s bicolored jade and gold eagle eyes. Also, the conversations between Luke and Wizard were especially amusing, seeing as how I’ve never read a fanfic that included any sort of interaction between the two of them. They’re definitely… different from each other, to say the least. I’m sure the Wizard couldn’t help but feel somewhat bemused at Luke’s hyperactive antics and crazy-sounding babbling. I swear, sometimes Luke just says and does things without giving them a second thought. And most of the things that come out of his mouth are just… so Luke.

Haha, I loved the part where Wizard was going on about how near impossible it would be for them to find the item needed break the barrier, and Luke just completely interrupted him by doing exactly that. “Found it.” Ah, that was classic. And Wizard is pretty funny, too – he definitely has some sassy comments in response to Luke’s strange outbursts. They’re certainly quite the interesting duo.

I have to wonder why the Witch bothers to go through all that trouble just to keep those two locked up, especially Luke. I mean, honestly, he’s just some silly mortal to her, isn’t he? And I can’t wait to see what Molly does next; she could never leave Luke there without trying her best to free him. I wonder whether she'll go to someone else for help, or attempt something on her own first?

Also, Wizard’s speech pattern doesn’t bother me at all; I mean, that’s how he speaks in the game, so you’re just staying true to his character. And I love his personality in this, I think you’ve done a great job writing his character so far!

Fantastic (and very long) chapter! It was well worth the wait, and I look forward to reading more!

- Cotton Candy Mareep

New chapter yayyy! Finally I've been waiting for this one :) I lover the way Luke and the wizard interacted I can actually see Luke being a goofy idiot and the wizard's irritation.

I think you did a great job as always with this one. Can't wait for the next chapter :)

Oh! And as for the riddle my guess would be whistle?

Whoa, this is a long chapter! I can’t believe I missed the update for so long.

Oh, and the Witch Princess’s swamp sounds so creepy, the way you describe it! Especially the moving vines in the fog. And the scene involving the Witch and Molly was perfectly written, I love their interactions and all the details you added into it, from the birds to the tea to their entire argument. It was perfect, and I can sort of understand both sides, though I sympathize more with Molly, of course. Sure, I get why Witch would want to hide away in the swamp after the witch hunts of the past, but that’s no reason to kidnap Molly’s boyfriend and turn him into a bird. Molly just wants to get him back safely; neither of them mean any harm. So I get the feeling that the Witch can be pretty irrational.

Anyway, awesome job on the story so far, I can’t wait to read more! :)

-Cotton Candy Mareep