Please continue writiting the book. Sure, you often gets the spellings and grammars wrong but I kind of find this story's plot quite interesting.

Thank you for the book!

Please continue this story :))

I didn't mind the grammar and was really enjoying the story please write some more

Love the plot and all but this fanfic of yours needs a lot of work.

Oji-chan!" I jump to hug him, chuckling gleefully as grandfather caught me and now playfully whirling me around. When I was finally on the ground, I smile at both my father and my mother, "Good moring Kaa-chan, Otou-san"

About two years an a half have passed since then. She was now turn almost 3 and even get her own room when her parent deem that she was mature enough. The first year...

- Do see any problem(s) above? Well if you don't know then I will tell you. You seem to be jumping from different perspectives; for example in the first paragraph you were using 1st P.O.V but in the second paragraph you seemed to be using 3rd P.O.V. Also, while my grammar is not that good, yours seemed to be worse than mine (i.e. mixing up past and present tense).

Hope to read more soon

"My short leg follow in step..." Are you insinuating that she only has one leg/limb? Seriously, your grammar needs a lot of work.

"Because...because it was like Uchiha." Don't you mean "Because...because my eyes- they look like Uchicha's." Also you didn't put anything at the end of the sentence like "Shinku mumbled".

'The' is missing in some sentences, an example is when Ayumu was thinking about the Uchiha clan. Basically it was just "Uchiha this/that" and without 'the' your like...about one person instead of the whole group/clan.

I don't know if you realized this but you have a lot of grammatical errors in your fanfic.

I love you so much right now. Seriously, marry me. You are wonderful. DO you know how hard it is to find an OC who isn't 'Oh hey lets become ninja for the lolz because jutsu is so awesome! It's not like I'll be learning to become a murderer for hire, slaughtering ninjas and innocents alike, all while witnessing children being manipulated into become mercerneries from the age of like 8.'

It is a really good story, please continue it.

plzzz update ignore other people and just write

I really like this...but you should fix your grammar.

oh? a rewrite... then please just ignore my first review...

why feel guilty when they are just characters from a story for him not too long ago?

is he also going to be like other SI who will try to change things for the better...

since it looks like it will be like the other SI fanfic, mr/ms author why should i read this?

i'm sorry if i sound i'm flaming/bashing but i'm really just curious.