Great story and epilogue would of been icing on the cake

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Nice. A little empty for the ending but overall a nice story.

Ok so love the story and your grammar definitely improved but this chapter feels like you were sleepy when you wrote it given the grammar just went out the window. Remember good grammar is the difference between knowing their shit and knowing they’re shit lol

Kenjutsu kenjutsu not kinjutsu. Sword not forbidden

well i'm not saying this fic is bad it is simple and not too complicated,i said this is a good read

Since he’s marrying the mizukage wouldn’t he adopt her last name?

look is this on purpose? "I now present for the very first time,Mr. and Mrs. NARUTO UZIMAKI." there's no Mei?

This is the stupidest thing. 'perfect curves' is not a description. Well he's got to marry at least she's pretty isn't only sexist it's poor writing. People don't think that way about their kids. Stripping a dream from a kid whose only ever had one dream isn't going to be a shrug moment.

Awesome story... writing's a bit crude and unrefined but that doesn't make it any less awesome.

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lol the made up names dont even sound like proper japanese names, and the author keeps getting the manga names wrong anyway

when kakashi offer's his porn you better take him up on that its a one in a life time chance

I'm loving the concept here. My only problem is Mei's age. I have a hard time believing a country lined up behind a girl so young. Especially since she would have been several years younger when it started. Plus they make this child Mizukage? I like that you decreased her age for the relationship but it's a hard pill to swallow story wise historically.

For the people complaining about Mei's kage status at 17, Gaara actually became Kazekage at 15-17 years of age.