Wow.

So well written. Nefertari's POV was very moving

This... This was so beautiful... Sad, heartbreaking, everything the scene would be if it had been in thr movie, I imagine. I loved your take on Ramses' s wife (wish we had seen something of her) and I loved even more that we can understand her, but also understand Moses, and see her respect (?) for him growing. And that ending... would you ever consider a second chapter?
Well, congratulations on this work, and I hope to see more from you!

This made me cry...

Dear Morning-Tide,

I enjoyed reading this story. It was such a touching moment in the movie to see Moses break down like that, and I think you were very creative to add Nefertari into the scene. I especially like Nefertari's characterization, specifically the way she starts out angry and softens up during her interaction with Moses, even to the point of wishing Rameses knew about Moses's regrets. Wouldn't it be fantastic to see this scene animated? I would pay a lot of money!
Sorry I don't have anything constructive to say, I just thought it was all pretty great. :)
-Samuel