loved this fic but was sooo disappointed that chapter 30 wasn't an epilogue

oh my fucking God, I love this. I've been avoiding this fic for ages because it has a huge favorite count but way lower follower count and was holding off on it, I regret every second of my life that wasn't reading this fanfic

Naruto is the Hagrid meme

This is too much for me hhhhhhh can't stop laughing in every single chapter

Take Pain's Eyes! Take Pain's Eyes!

Hi, just finished reading this and I really enjoyed it. (I binged the whole thing in about a week :D )

This story is pretty old at this point so this might not be relevant but one problem I had with your work was that you have a bit of a tendency to tell instead of show. There's a lot of "person was feeling sad and person b was kind of happy and person c was..." This was especially bad in the first handful of chapters, which often just felt like a list of events. This might have been partially because the stakes were so low at that point though because you definitely improved on this further into the fic.

Overall I really did enjoy this though, especially after we diverged meaningfully from canon. I see you have a number of other fics that I'm definitely going to check out in the near future.

had a lot of fun reading this story. its one I've passed over frequently thinking it was a different story, but im glad to have given it another try.

IT IS THE MOST AMAZING STORY I'VE EVER READ! Usually by the end of a fic I lose interest but this was soooooo gooooood. Thank you for this master piece.

also im really glad he didnt end up having to kill any innocents. that would have killed the story but he didnt need to so all is good. though I would have preferred the thought to be dismissed instead of considered by naruto

after finishing this story, I think in the end I like it. Im sad at all the death, but I'm looking forward to naruto and xanna's adventures in future crossovers

i think with all the death. it feels like the sacrifices made were pointless now that they werent brought back

at least the afterlife is a good place for all narutos buddies. TwT I wish they came back though

i dont like how naruto is willing to murder innocents. It kinda ruins his character. I think the hokage omake would have been a bettet path to go down. Everything that made the original naruto great is dead or corrupted at this point in the story. I'm kinda disappointed tbh.

I'm sure you have moved past much of what makes this first chapter a bit annoying or lower quality. And most of the time, that doesn't really bother me all that much. And from a technical point of view, there really isn't that much wrong with the premise.

I just want to say that completely humanizing Kurama (or just the Kyuubi, since you renamed him/her) made a concept I was extremely interested in a lot less interesting to me. More so that you made the humanization extremely "sexy."

There are multiple ways that would have made the dynamic a lot more interesting. You could have had the Kyuubi be able to change shape (since a mass of chakra doesn't necessarily have a set form). And so when their relationship develops, she might choose to change for Naruto. I dunno. Something like that. The second option would be to have her be a *normal* (ish) looking woman that Naruto is attracted to for... you know... personality reasons. Not just the perv level of "That person is extremely sexually attractive. Please procreate with me."

In either case, it would be WAY more interesting if the Kyuubi started out just as antagonistic as in normal Naruto canon. For the same motivations. Just perhaps a bit more talkative.

This ends up looking like a Jiraiya novel themed around Naruto, with a convenient age jump to keep things a little less awkward and pedophilic. (Remember that "slow" romance does not mean that it took them several stated years to get together. It means that it develops slowly from our perspective.)

If you had just flat out said that this was sex-focused, and was *aimed* at someone just wanting to jack off, then it would be totally fine. But I was expecting a normal story with maybe a few scenes, and probably some gore in fights.

Anyway, I've already spent a bit too much time on this, but I suppose it was a problem with expectations I got from reading the description and the beginning AN.

Spite.