Great chapter. Needs a proofreader though. Also, why would she have the engagement ring on her middle finger instead of her ring finger?

One of my favorite things about vampire Edward are his beliefs in marriage and sex. The fact that he wants to wait to have sec with Bella until they are married shows that as he did grow with time he did not compromise himself and i love that! I always wished that Bella understood that but she couldn’t even get past the whole he doesn’t want to have sex with me thing thinking that meant he didn’t want her lol maybe i was just born in the wrong time

This was honestly pretty awesome!
I absolutely loved the things you changed and loved the things you kept the same
Adore the kids to the absolute end
I don't have enough words to tell you
Thanks for sharing _

I hate how pushy Alice is.

I love this history only good ones make me cry. I just wanted to say that I didn’t like how it said real parents. Forme my real parents are the ones who raised me. Like you should have said Biological or birth parent because Edward believes them as his real parents as well. This is not a hate comment I just wanted to saya that you are a great writer and as my English teacher says good writer take critiques. Love you. Peace out.

OOooo this chapter was satisfying

You really need to space out these paragraphs, it's to jumbled and hard to read at times

Yeah it's like you suddenly gave up on this story. Format is terrible, characters are just oh so happy and wonderful. Sorry to say but it was good until the last chapter. Now it's just cheese.

Yeah so this chapter was very strange. You went completely out of character. It's like you changed their personalities all of a sudden.

I think my original theory may be correct- I think maybe there are TWINS in her belly. Each twin has their own gift, one a shield and one projection. A boy and a girl. Wouldn’t that be so cool. Still loving this story to death. Reading on...

I’m really loving your story. I also wish you’d finish “Written in Heaven”. I read what you have there so far and really loved the premise. I think it would make a great Tory if it were finished. I also think your writing is superb. The mistakes are minimal and not even a hindered either to reading. You write better than some writers who speak and read English as a FIRST language! Keep it up! Again thank you.

I know that English is your second language, but this story I GREAT and you did very well. I am really enjoying reading it. As far a mistakes go, even us first language English speaking and writing folks make mistakes. Don’t worry about that. Just keep writing and it will be like practice. Keep it up, you are doing so well. Great story concept and well written too. I hope you eventually continue with “Written in Heaven” also. I thought that was a wonderful concept too. I’ve read all you have written on that one. I just wish there was more of it. Happy writing.

can't they have sex without the family making comments?

does no one in the cullen household ever knock before barging into some ones bedroom? i would kill anyone who did that in my house! and her only excuse was she wanted bella to change her clothes? what a pain in the ass! what bella wears to chicago is none of her business.

the cullens should all leave and never come back. other than charlie and the webbers everyone in that inbred little town are a bunch of hypocritical, jealous, small minded busy bodies who can't seem to stay out of other peoples affairs.